Spring Poem.

[Azwed]

I don't normaly write poetry because I consider myself to be one of the most poeticly deffecient people on Earth. I was inspired after walking around campus on our first truly warm day and thought the only way to get it out was through a poem.

I posted this on the GB but thought I might get a better response here.


Spring Campus




Oh how I love Springtime
Let me count the ways

Short Shorts
Short Skirts
Spaghetti Straps
Strappy Sandals

Lovely Ladies
Walking in the sunlight
Walking in the warm air

Hip Huggers
Ass Huggers
Bust Huggers

Low Ridding
Hip Hugging Jeans
Exposing Sexy Midriffs

Tight Ass, Hugging Shorts
Thong Lines Visible
Long Legs and High Heels

Tight Halter tops
Exposed Cleavage in a push up bra
Sudden Cool Breezes hardening nipples

Spring is here and I Love it
And I Love what it Brings

 

[tigerjen]

Springtime brings.....

major eye candy! That is what I gleaned from your
poem, Azwed.......I might call your piece an 'original',
but it can also be applied for the summertime....



tigerjen

 

[Fairytat]

Spring Campus

Oh how I love Springtime
Let me count the ways

Short Shorts
Short Skirts
Spaghetti Straps
Strappy Sandals

Lovely Ladies
Walking in the sunlight
Walking in the warm air

Hip Huggers
Ass Huggers
Bust Huggers

Low Ridding
Hip Hugging Jeans
Exposing Sexy Midriffs

Tight Ass, Hugging Shorts
Thong Lines Visible
Long Legs and High Heels

Tight Halter tops
Exposed Cleavage in a push up bra
Sudden Cool Breezes hardening nipples

Spring is here and I Love it
And I Love what it Brings

This is a good attempt for a guy who professes to be a horrible poet. It's filled with lusty zeal and you definitely get your point across. However, I have a few problems with it. The poem is a bit haphazardly organized so you need to arrange it so the flow isn't interrupted. Sometimes it helps to have punctuation. This allows the reader's eye to pause where you want it to and continue on. (Though poetry is prolly the only form that allows little to no punctuation). Plus, you need to figure out which direction you want to take it. Do you want short precise words (ie short shorts) or longer phrases (exposed cleavage in a push up bra)? Finally, is it really necessary to capitalize every word? It is accepted practice to cap the first letter in every line but not needed for every word. However, this is again, up to the author's discretion.

Here is what I think the poem should look like (IMHO):

Spring Campus

Oh how I love Springtime;
Let me count the ways.

Lovely ladies,
Walking in the sunlight,
Walking in the warm air.

Wearing low riding,
Hip hugging jeans,
Exposing sexy midriffs.

Tight ass hugging shorts,
Thong lines visible;
Long legs and high heels.

Tight Halter tops
Exposed cleavage in a push up bra,
Sudden cool breezes hardening nipples.

Spring is here and I love it;
And I love what it brings.

If you really want it, you can put the "Short skirts, spaghetti strap, strappy sandals" in there somewhere. At any rate, this was definitely a male poem

 

[JUDO]

ha-Ha!

In the midst of all our technological manifestations, isn't Mother Nature wonderful?


- Judo