Sister wants her hot brother

[BlackSnake]

Todd is a hottie....all the girls think so, including his sister, Jessie. Needless to say, his sister had lots of friends, all bidding for a chance to see him.

 

[Screaming Grace]

Todd is a hottie....all the girls think so, including his sister, Jessie. Needless to say, his sister had lots of friends, all bidding for a chance to see him.

How about this for an opening


I was 18 at the time and it was the night of the prom, I don’t know why but I hadn’t a date. My sister was 21 was home from university. She asked me why I wasn’t going to the prom I told her there was no one I wanted to go with.

“What Happened to Tammy?” She asked.

“Greg Watson is what happened, the new football Jock in town.” I replied annoyed with my hopeless situation.

She asked me if I would like to go to the prom with her as no one at school would know her as she had been away for three years almost.

At first I said no but after thinking about it Hell My sister was very sexy 5'6" 115 pounds baby blue eyes, long brown hair. Her measurements are 36b 24 32. I thought why not so I shouted up the stairs, “Yes.”

She came to the top of the stairs poking her head over the banister Telling me to get ready while she found something to wear.

I said “I needed to take a shower and get some decent clothes on.”

She Laughed and said she needed to take a shower too, so I let her go first. I guess she thought I was in my bedroom because she came out of her room naked and did I get an eyeful.

She was sexy and she knew it. I got a hard on and couldn't take my eyes off her. She had seen me looking at her and she smiled. She said “I really needed to shave but could do with some help.”

She asked me if I would do it for you I said “hell yeah.” Doing my best stone cold Impersonation.

She sat on the edge of the tub and I went and get a razor and some shaving cream. I lathered her up good and started shaving her pussy, which was seemed to glisten with wetness. I pulled one lip to the side and shaved her and did the same to other side. When I was done I washed her now bare pussy with a towel.

She looked really sexy so I leaned in and started licking her pussy. She said, “yes little brother eat my pussy.” I spread her lips and slid my tongue deep inside her. I sensed she was close to having an orgasm and I sucked on her clit as hard as I could. She grabbed my head and pushed me harder to her pussy.

Scream

 

[BlackSnake]

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She was sexy and she knew it. I got a hard on and couldn't take my eyes off her. She had seen me looking at her and she smiled. She said “I really needed to shave but could do with some help.”

She asked me if I would do it for you I said “hell yeah.” Doing my best stone cold Impersonation.

She sat on the edge of the tub and I went and get a razor and some shaving cream. I lathered her up good and started shaving her pussy, which was seemed to glisten with wetness. I pulled one lip to the side and shaved her and did the same to other side. When I was done I washed her now bare pussy with a towel.

She looked really sexy so I leaned in and started licking her pussy. She said, “yes little brother eat my pussy.” I spread her lips and slid my tongue deep inside her. I sensed she was close to having an orgasm and I sucked on her clit as hard as I could. She grabbed my head and pushed me harder to her pussy.

Scream

I loved it up to this point. I think you jumped too fast into the sex scene between the brother and sister without establishing a reason why the sister would spread her legs for her own brother. I would by this after the prom, but not before. I this it's a very good story just like you wrote it. Finish this one. I will love to read the finished product.


I am looking for a situation where the girl is younger and the agressor.

 

[sirhugs]

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I loved it up to this point. I think you jumped too fast into the sex scene between the brother and sister without establishing a reason why the sister would spread her legs for her own brother. I would by this after the prom, but not before. I this it's a very good story just like you wrote it. Finish this one. I will love to read the finished product.


I am looking for a situation where the girl is younger and the agressor.

I agree with Snake that the sex should be after the prom. Perhaps she fantasicizes in the shower before. Also, I like his idea of setting up brother as desired by all her friends. So they tealk about him, she is jealous, becauase, after akll, she can't. That goes before your plot. The cancelled prom date is her big chance......

 

[BlackSnake]

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I agree with Snake that the sex should be after the prom. Perhaps she fantasicizes in the shower before. Also, I like his idea of setting up brother as desired by all her friends. So they tealk about him, she is jealous, becauase, after akll, she can't. That goes before your plot. The cancelled prom date is her big chance......

I like the way you tied those two together. It could stay the way that he wrote it up, with the sister being older. Her friends are all hot for her younger stud brother. She could have seen the package he his carrying and desires it. She could be a hottie as well. Sometimes the simatrics are genetic, so they both could have hot bods. As hot as his sister's friends are, she is still the sexiest. He could keep his thoughts about his sister hidden, and let her play out her fantasy.

As far as the prom. No of his classmates would know his sister, so the sister conviences him to pretend like she is a real date and not his sister. At the prom they hold hands, take photos, dance, and definately make the other girls jealous.

And then there's after the prom. They do not go home, they get a bottle of champaign....

 

[Pookie]

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As far as the prom. No of his classmates would know his sister, so the sister conviences him to pretend like she is a real date and not his sister. At the prom they hold hands, take photos, dance, and definately make the other girls jealous.

I don't see how that would work. His friends would know what his sister looks like even if she were older. My friends know what my older brother looks like just from growing up with me and going to school together. Even if they just moved there, if he is so hot, he would have had friends over that would have seen his sister or pictures of her. It would be hard for me to buy that no one wouldn't recoginize her.

Also, if he is so hot. He would have another date quickly and easily I would bet.

 

[BlackSnake]

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I don't see how that would work. His friends would know what his sister looks like even if she were older. My friends know what my older brother looks like just from growing up with me and going to school together. Even if they just moved there, if he is so hot, he would have had friends over that would have seen his sister or pictures of her. It would be hard for me to buy that no one wouldn't recoginize her.

Also, if he is so hot. He would have another date quickly and easily I would bet.

You make a good point, but we can easily write it away. I'm sure that you have heard of beautiful girls sitting at home on prom night, because no one asked them. Guys just assumed that she had a date and didn't bother to ask her.

Something happen with this guys date. She dumped him for the new football stud. Credible.

Here's another thing. When I was going up my mother didn't allow me to have my friends running about the house. Kids play outside and not in her house, period. Credible, because it's true.

The guy is new to the school, but already he is old news because of a new face in town. Sister is making her first visit, non of his new friends know her. She can look much different than any pictures in their home.

In the story anything can be reasoned away, if the author believes it's important to the story to do so.

 

[sirhugs]

ok, how about twisting it like this- the sis is 19, graduating. is upset her gf invited Todd , 18 yr old junior, to be gf's date. But as sis showers, mastubating thinking of sex post prom, she realizes that it isn't her date she's imagining, its Todd. At the end of the night, the gf Todd came with is so drunk she passes out, so sis finds todd in a dark room, where he was waiting to get lucky . the old mistaken identity frivolity ensues.

 

[Pookie]

ok, how about twisting it like this- the sis is 19, graduating. is upset her gf invited Todd , 18 yr old junior, to be gf's date. But as sis showers, mastubating thinking of sex post prom, she realizes that it isn't her date she's imagining, its Todd. At the end of the night, the gf Todd came with is so drunk she passes out, so sis finds todd in a dark room, where he was waiting to get lucky . the old mistaken identity frivolity ensues.

Sirhugs,
This type of scenario would work for me and could be quite hot. I like the direction of your idea.

Blacksnake,
I agree authors can reason away pretty much anything. But you eventually reach a point that it will seem contrived. IMO, the more readers don't have to suspend reality, the hotter it will be for them while reading it. Keep working at it though, a version of your idea can make for a pretty hot story.

Pookie

 

[BlackSnake]

Sirhugs,
This type of scenario would work for me and could be quite hot. I like the direction of your idea.

Blacksnake,
I agree authors can reason away pretty much anything. But you eventually reach a point that it will seem contrived. IMO, the more readers don't have to suspend reality, the hotter it will be for them while reading it. Keep working at it though, a version of your idea can make for a pretty hot story.

Pookie

I agree that the author should have to work to hard at it. When the author convey to the reader that no one knows his sister, that is enough, I think. Pushing that aside and continue building the tension of the big event.

 

[Screaming Grace]

Hell Did I cause a problem it was only the start writen in less than five mins.

Scream

 

[sirhugs]

Hell Did I cause a problem it was only the start writen in less than five mins.

Scream

No problem here Grace- just the creative debate at work. This is how we hone ideas, challenge ourselves, and test ideas.

 

[BlackSnake]

Exactally what Sirhugs said. We workout the little things that make the idea grow to something that the readers will find credible and/or enjoyable.

I bet you can find many different versions of an idea that will work by themselves in most of the threads here.

Pick at things and insert your opinion. This isn't personal attacking, just opinions.

 

[Pookie]

Just as Sirhugs and Blacksnake said, we were just discussing ideas. I didn't view any of it as causing a problem or as confrontational. I enjoy tossing around ideas with others sometimes. The ideas of others cause me to think about my own approach to writing. I learn something everyday, especially from people with different viewpoints of the same thing.

I think any of us could take the general idea and write a very hot story, using our own creative approaches.

 

[BlackSnake]

This is why there are some many stories about the same thing, but they are very different...

 

[sirhugs]

and we share. On this thread, for instance, I welcome anyone to claim my plot ideas. I currently hacve at least 4 works in progres, so at the current pace of a story every 2 weeks, I'll not get to this any time soon, so, feel free, if you like, to use my ideas as your own.