Short Story feedback!

[Saucydisher11]

Looking for constructive criticism, it’s my first submission, and would be interested, and motivated to put some more up.

But I want to know how people feel about it first.

Is it too short?

Is the lack of detail taking away from the moment?

And is it believable?

Anyway, enjoy (fingers-crossed) http://www.literotica.com/s/the-car-8

 

[P_A_Solcrofft]

Feedback on the car

Hi. I read your story, and sent you a private message on it. I hope you find it helpful

 

[Saucydisher11]

Thanks for the awesome feedback, PA. Gonna give yours a read soon. Working on another with more detail. Thanks

 

[Saucydisher11]

Thanks to everyone who got back to me with feedback, its some of the best advice I have got on her. Thanks for taking the time.