seeking feedback on my first work after a long hiatus

[Nameless_Rose]

Hi everyone! I was wondering if anyone would possibly be interested in looking at my new story, "A Mind of Winter" (erotic horror). It's the first erotica I've written for a while, and I would love to hear some constructive criticism. Thanks for looking!

 

[manyeyedhydra]

Some of us have sigs turned off and are too lazy to hunt. Have you got a link?

 

[Guest]

My semi-good deed for the day:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=371972

 

[Nameless_Rose]

Thank you!

 

[elfin_odalisque]

My semi-good deed for the day:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=371972

Gnome, despite your continual attempts to try and be a black hat, tickling your soft underbelly proves you's really a white hat. Thanks for the link.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

nameless_rose, Hi

It's a bit too long to take a view tonight, but I will come back tomorrow. Give Gnome a sloppy kiss.

 

[Guest]

Gnome, despite your continual attempts to try and be a black hat, tickling your soft underbelly proves you's really a white hat. Thanks for the link.

("Damn! They've found me out!")

 

[manyeyedhydra]

Yipes, that is a long one. I'll try and get on it when I've got some more time.