Seeking a British Editor

[masterandmargarita]

I have a group sex story (male first person) involving a female British character. British-Indian, but not Indian in culture, just appearance, so you don't necessarily have to have expertise on the Indian part (but it couldn't hurt!). I want her to feel authentic in her dialogue. My wife is my editor so all I'm asking for is a page or two of dialoge editing with your unique expertise. I've stumbled into my fair share of excellent Brit-Lit so I know you're out there Thanks in advance!

 

[geronimo_appleby]

I have a group sex story (male first person) involving a female British character. British-Indian, but not Indian in culture, just appearance, so you don't necessarily have to have expertise on the Indian part (but it couldn't hurt!). I want her to feel authentic in her dialogue. My wife is my editor so all I'm asking for is a page or two of dialoge editing with your unique expertise. I've stumbled into my fair share of excellent Brit-Lit so I know you're out there Thanks in advance!

i'm no ed., but i'd be happy to help if i can. if you don't get any other offers, let me know.

 

[masterandmargarita]

Thanks geronimo! I'll put together the dialogue and pm it to you, and will give you credit along with any others that want to have a look. I've got "fancy" being used as a verb and "flatmates" instead of roommates, but I'm sure there is more that I can do to create some convincing dialogue.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Thanks geronimo! I'll put together the dialogue and pm it to you, and will give you credit along with any others that want to have a look. I've got "fancy" being used as a verb and "flatmates" instead of roommates, but I'm sure there is more that I can do to create some convincing dialogue.

i'll pm an email address.

 

[masterandmargarita]

I sent the condensed version for your edits and the full story as well to your email. Thanks!

 

[LastLostIdols]

I'm not an editor either but I'm from northern england so I might be able to add some insight if you'd like.

 

[masterandmargarita]

I'm not an editor either but I'm from northern england so I might be able to add some insight if you'd like.

Thanks for the offer! I'm good for now, but I'll pm you if I end up needing some extra help.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

I'm not an editor either but I'm from northern england so I might be able to add some insight if you'd like.

God's own county of north yorkshire?

 

[LastLostIdols]

'Fraid not more north-west, merseyside to be precise. Though I adore yorkshire and would love to live there I've been to York many a time.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

'Fraid not more north-west, merseyside to be precise. Though I adore yorkshire and would love to live there I've been to York many a time.

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[geronimo_appleby]

I sent the condensed version for your edits and the full story as well to your email. Thanks!

done and sent.

i hope it makes sense!

 

[masterandmargarita]

Got it, geronimo, that was exactly the kind of feedback I needed. Thanks again!