Sci-Fi/Fantasy Chain Story Idea

[Darkniciad]

Okay, here we go. I didn't grab everything, but I did pick up a fair variety of various things.

Laresa Descriptions

Eyes:
The pale violet eyes glimmered
Her eyes were the color of the deepest ocean he'd traveled upon, then they shimmered to another color, one of the brightest grasses he'd played on as a child
her eyes flickered between green and gold
Her beautiful violet eyes
Her sparkling eyes had the color of the sea, changing from grey to green to blue

• I think we can pretty much say her eyes are open for interpretation

Hair:
long silvery tresses
Her hair, a silvery shade, hung down her back in curls
thick sliver locks
the moonlight curls of hair that covered her head flowing down
hair that was impossibly light, looking almost as if it was spun of silver

• We can pretty much consider her hair to be a silvery white-blonde

Body:
her trim figure and full breasts
creamy thighs
her slender thighs
pale pink buds
She was small, her head coming barely to his mid chest
nicely rounded breasts
firm, full breasts
berry pink tip
the taut skin of her stomach
her slender frame
breasts were round and full, nipples pink and taut
her small hand
smooth, milky thighs
The petite woman
Her firm breasts, surmounted with pale pink tips

• She's petite, though with full hips and breasts that bely her trim figure.

Naughty Bits:
He stared down at her soft, white curls
soft white blonde curls that covered her sex
her juices tasting of the sweetest of nectars, their scent that of cinnamon, sandalwood and musk
her sex, surrounded in soft, white-blonde curls

• White-blonde curls, unique taste, and virgin-tight How clinical am I? *laugh*

Voice:
The voice of an angel
melodious sounding

• She has a melodious voice

Clothes:
her gown, one of sheer blue, and then green, then pink.
A round purple gem could be seen, winking from her navel
the thin vest that left her stomach bare
A thin vest barely constrained her well-rounded bosom, leaving her stomach bare
Billowing pants... the airy fabric...

• Magical, gossamyr gowns. Thin vests baring cleavage and stomach. Billowing pants that border on transparent

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Great job, looks like we all are pretty much the same on everything, but the eyes. lol. . . I've posted a link to your one page description in the cheat sheet. Thanks.

 

[Darkniciad]

Great job, looks like we all are pretty much the same on everything, but the eyes. lol. . . I've posted a link to your one page description in the cheat sheet. Thanks.

Inconsistent eyes actually works. Eyes are often used as a way to show someone has supernatural abilities, and as a window into their soul. Her eyes having almost a "mood ring" quality fits her.

Violet is mentioned more often than any other color, so perhaps we should call that "natural", while the rest are mood/location related. Any time we switch from violet, try to have it be somehow related to how she's feeling, or where she is. That pattern is more or less already there in the posted chapters - or close enough for us to say that's what we were doing all along. *laugh*

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Inconsistent eyes actually works. Eyes are often used as a way to show someone has supernatural abilities, and as a window into their soul. Her eyes having almost a "mood ring" quality fits her.

Violet is mentioned more often than any other color, so perhaps we should call that "natural", while the rest are mood/location related. Any time we switch from violet, try to have it be somehow related to how she's feeling, or where she is. That pattern is more or less already there in the posted chapters - or close enough for us to say that's what we were doing all along. *laugh*

I don't know about trying to purposely weave in her "natural" color, perhaps having someone note it occasionally would be fine, but I don't think we need to "mood" ring her eyes. The way we are blending them into the story is cool, but I agree having to note the natural eyes in at least a few chapters would be good. So there is at least one reference somewhere to back up our claim to her eye color shifting if a reader points it out.

((side not to deathlynx (for when he reads this). . .weave here is in the present tense. )) hee hee hee hee. ))

 

[Darkniciad]

I don't know about trying to purposely weave in her "natural" color, perhaps having someone note it occasionally would be fine, but I don't think we need to "mood" ring her eyes. The way we are blending them into the story is cool, but I agree having to note the natural eyes in at least a few chapters would be good. So there is at least one reference somewhere to back up our claim to her eye color shifting if a reader points it out.

((side not to deathlynx (for when he reads this). . .weave here is in the present tense. )) hee hee hee hee. ))

I'll get the violet reference in mine, as it has been a while since it cropped up. Probably have a shift in there when she transforms - as that has another reason for a color shift - then carry it over for a few moments on the transformation back ( going past my original ending with the changes I made in the rewrite )

I'm also going to tackle those eyelashes. I'm thinking about darker lashes, but with subtle, sparkling silver hints whenever the light hits them just right. Thoughts?

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

I'll get the violet reference in mine, as it has been a while since it cropped up. Probably have a shift in there when she transforms - as that has another reason for a color shift - then carry it over for a few moments on the transformation back ( going past my original ending with the changes I made in the rewrite )

I'm also going to tackle those eyelashes. I'm thinking about darker lashes, but with subtle, sparkling silver hints whenever the light hits them just right. Thoughts?

Sounds good.

 

[deathlynx]

I'm also going to tackle those eyelashes. I'm thinking about darker lashes, but with subtle, sparkling silver hints whenever the light hits them just right. Thoughts?

That sounds kind of cool...Hard to imagine but certainly cool!

Oh, and Red, from the American Heritage online

Weave
NOUN:
The pattern, method of weaving, or construction of a fabric: a twill weave; a loose weave.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Oh, and Red, from the American Heritage online

LOL. . .

 

[Darkniciad]

That sounds kind of cool...Hard to imagine but certainly cool!

Oh, and Red, from the American Heritage online

It's magic! *laugh*

It still needs work, but I think I can convey what I'm aiming at in the story. Just a little more mystery for her eyes. Eyes are important, and I haven't been paying anywhere near enough attention to them in my writing.

 

[deathlynx]

It's magic! *laugh*

It still needs work, but I think I can convey what I'm aiming at in the story. Just a little more mystery for her eyes. Eyes are important, and I haven't been paying anywhere near enough attention to them in my writing.

I have to agree with my own...I think I've been slipping some...

 

[Guest]

This is just a thought, but what if there were two ways to free a genie, one would be when their time of imprisonment in their ring, locket, etc, was up. The second would be for a master or mistress to not wish for anything but the genie's freedom. And since most of them don't believe in her and wish for something so that she proves who she is, it curtails her being freed?

 

[Darkniciad]

This is just a thought, but what if there were two ways to free a genie, one would be when their time of imprisonment in their ring, locket, etc, was up. The second would be for a master or mistress to not wish for anything but the genie's freedom. And since most of them don't believe in her and wish for something so that she proves who she is, it curtails her being freed?

I've always thought of the ring as being a dark, near malevolant pseudo-intelligence. They are created in death according to the mythos we have now after chapter 3, after all. That almost precludes a "time limit" because whatever put them there ( and in my thinking, the ring itself ) doesn't want to give up the genie.

A time limit feels a bit like it would lead to death too, in my mind.

Wishing for nothing else has possibilities...

I just typed the last few words of my second draft a few seconds ago. Going to get it spell checked and in Red's PM box in a moment for a looksee.

 

[deathlynx]

Yeah, my thought had been about nothing but the genie's freedom as well...I'd also been thinking of (and discussing with Red) including an organization which compiles information on the various djiin...Sort of like the Watchers from Highlander: The Series...Possibly started by someone, way back in history, who had attempted to wish a genie free and failed...Then they spent the rest of their life trying to discover how, only to expand the search into an organization...

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

This is just a thought, but what if there were two ways to free a genie, one would be when their time of imprisonment in their ring, locket, etc, was up. The second would be for a master or mistress to not wish for anything but the genie's freedom. And since most of them don't believe in her and wish for something so that she proves who she is, it curtails her being freed?

They wouldn't know when their time was up right? or would they?

and

No wishes at all and then to suddenly wish for the genie's freedom works, but then. . .where does the Genie go?

In Laresa's case, does she go back to her orgin? perhaps free of never becoming a sacrifice again, but as a leader of her people and to the young man introduced in Tseranc's chapter (who in my opinion came across as her first love) . . .

or does she go back to a Master/Mistress she was very much in love with?

or does she stay stuck in the time and place her Master/Mistress wished her free at?

These are good things to discuss now since we are moving into the double digits for chapters.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

I've always thought of the ring as being a dark, near malevolant pseudo-intelligence. They are created in death according to the mythos we have now after chapter 3, after all. That almost precludes a "time limit" because whatever put them there ( and in my thinking, the ring itself ) doesn't want to give up the genie.

A time limit feels a bit like it would lead to death too, in my mind.

Wishing for nothing else has possibilities...

I just typed the last few words of my second draft a few seconds ago. Going to get it spell checked and in Red's PM box in a moment for a looksee.

I don't know if a time limit feels like death to me, to the Genie it may, for those that read my chapter coming out later then yeah, he if he was pulled from the ring forever would feel like he'd rather be dead than mortal. . .

A time limit for freedom feels like a good possibility, but I really think the only way to destroy/kill a genie would be with the destruction of the ring.

Your second draft works great and you did a good job.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Yeah, my thought had been about nothing but the genie's freedom as well...I'd also been thinking of (and discussing with Red) including an organization which compiles information on the various djiin...Sort of like the Watchers from Highlander: The Series...Possibly started by someone, way back in history, who had attempted to wish a genie free and failed...Then they spent the rest of their life trying to discover how, only to expand the search into an organization...

My thoughts on this since we have discussed it via email still are the same.

I like the idea and it has potential in giving us a plot to work on, because really we've not yet introduced a plot for her. I think the "freedom" idea being introduced is a good plot, but not a strong one. Everybody eventually will wonder. . . freedom, oh yeah, typical plot, but we could use another plot device for the story.

Here is the problem I have. . .

We've never spoke of this group, not once. There is no back history in any chapters and we need to establish this group before the 10th of October for it to work, (IMO). Why the 10th?

Since we've never spoke of them, we need to explain them somehow and using Horace, (the older genie) to do that makes since, since we have said Laresa is young. So if we don't bring them in with him knowing of them and he is one of the "first formed by flame" then I don't know if it would blend to bring them in later.

Second. . .

Back during Dry Valley we had an "evil" character introduced by gotwood49. This was a great idea and kept a cliff hanger on some chapters, but he was the only one allowed to write about Jonis after the initial introduction in Chapter one and then the lead in a later Chapter. This was so the "essence" of Jonis was not lost by him trying to be betrayed by other writers.

So, if we decide to introduce this group, do we have one or two writers focus on them and carry them through the story as they "observe" Laresa and follow people who the suspect to be Master/Mistress around? or do we all just post bits of observers in our stories?

I don't like the thought of all of us doing it, because it could very well distract from Laresa and her life and come across hectic and scattered. With one or two writers focused on this organization then it would come across more uniform.

These are just opinions, but things that we should address. If we go with this group, then I would think Horace would know about them. . .he's been around for a long time. So we need to get the feedback from as many writers as we can. (IMO)

 

[Darkniciad]

The "watchers" idea certainly has some serious potential. I actually had a thought along similar lines about freeing her, where one of her Masters passes her legend down through the family - and they spend their lives searching for the ring and the means to free Laresa. I was thinking more along the lines of a "National Treasure" obsession than "Watchers", but pretty much the same thing.

That idea would also let the conditions to free a genie be very complicated and nigh but impossible to discover. If we have the organization form several thousand years ago, they could have found out a lot by now.

You're right that we need to get this established quickly, and get the plotline running ASAP, if we're going with it. Twenty is a logical number of chapters, but considering how many ideas everyone is churning out, we could go beyond that and have more time on this one, I suppose.

If everyone likes this idea, I can drop in a hint of it in mine - just a little subtle mention at the end - I know the perfect place to drop it, actually.

Since most of Laresa's tales take place in the 20th-21st century, we could have part of it be that each djinn is drawn more frequently toward a specific time period, especially early in their existence. That would help establish why the watchers are able to locate her with some degree of regularity. Once she's popped up a couple of times, her "range" is established and they turn loose the bloodhounds on those centuries.

They might even take it upon themselves to move the ring ( when a Master dies of old age while in possession of her, for example ) into the possession of people whom they feel might have the potential to lead them to clues about freeing her. Unique perspectives and the like. I could drop something in the beginning of mine to work along those lines as well. I like the idea of the first mentions of them being very mysterious, with not even a face being put to our "watchers", keep them in the shadows.

The more I think about it, the better this sounds. Everybody get in here and brainstorm! I've only got eleven days to get anything in and get my chapter edited and submitted, so if anything is going in mine, it has to get in there *soon*

We also need to be careful and address paradox. Example: My latest chapter takes place in 1925. Danielle's is also in the 20's ( 1929). My first chapter was in the late 1800's. Red has a wild west, no date but it should run in the 1800's as well... all running pretty close.

My first chapter causes no current problems, as it only has a decade time span. Red's doesn't have a specific date, and Danielle's lead-in leaves enough leeway to avoid paradox there. Danielle's also doesn't go into any span of years, and the transition isn't addressed in the next chapter, so no worries about paradox there.

My current chapter is the one with issues. I'm stretching mine over quite a span of time at the very end. It would be crossing over Danielle's certainly. That puts Laresa in two places at once - or maybe not. We probably saved our asses by the "has to rest in the ring" *laugh* Part of that need might very well be the need for her to be with another Master in the same time period.

I think we'd better get a concordance together with the timing of each Master, and any information about how long the service lasted. I extended Famke out through her lifetime in my lead-in to Outlaw, for example. Long span of years there that needs to be watched out for.

I'll work on a concordance tonight, and get feedback from the Authors anywhere there is wiggle room on the date - to nail things down. We have to make sure there is ample time for Laresa to have Masters in the same time period throughout her jumps.

It could actually introduce some interesting plot points with the "watchers" There could be two watchers in different locations in the 30's, one watching Danielle's Laresa, and one watching my second Laresa. The one who has been in service longer would know more - have changed and evolved - despite the fact they're appearing only seconds apart perhaps.

 

[deathlynx]

Ok, taking the discussion fully from email

I hadn't really been thinking of them as a full plot in their own right, more a sub-plot...One reason they may not have been mentioned is they are limited in number (say master and two assistants at any given time) and secret to boot...For this think the afformentioned Watchers in Highlander, the priest in 5th Element or the society in DaVince Code...

Basically I was thinking more along the lines of using them as a potential foil for authors (us ) to explain how a human could know so much about the truth about genies before actually summoning one...Yes, one of the possibilities is as a means for someone to eventually free Laresa (if we go with no wishes but her freedom)...

As for introducing them fast, well, most haven't read it yet, but in Chapter 8 the main character, Dolph, has actively sought out Laresa...He knew about her ring and bought it (after an implied extensive search)...When he summoned her he practically quoted the rules to her...Perhaps he managed to find (or steal) a manuscript in which she was mentioned, not realizing there are more than just her...I never explained how he knew what he knew specifically for future use...The potential to expand on it by anyone...

Basically, especially since we jump through time so much, the members of the group, hense the group's motivations, in any given time could be determined by each author...They don't all have to be neutral, or even benevolant (so long as they don't permanently impact Laresa herself)...Heck, they wouldn't even have to play a role in every, or even most, stories...

Now for the freedom questions
Personally I'm not sure about the time limit...I'm assuming that would be "her" time rather than through the eras...If we go with this then Laresa would be far from her time anyway since it's been mentioned she's a much younger genie than others...If there is a time limit it really won't impact her so much as others...

As for where they go when freed?
I honestly hadn't thought about it...I suppose I thouht along the lines of Aladin where he remains in the time he was wished free...Although granting her the final wish of where he ends up could be very cool too...

 

[Guest]

My next chapter takes place in the Desert where my hero is stumbling through after being separated from his group and his horse dying. He drops, finds the ring, puts it on and passes out from thirst. Laresa transports him to an oasis so that she can wake him enough for him to wish him better.

Now wouldn't some dark robed figures on camels with spy glasses be good about then? But, if Laresa is so powerful, couldn't she see the watchers or would they have some kind of protection from a genie's wrath....I don't know, just let me know if you like the idea because I'm not all that far in the storyline and it needs something to punch it up besides sex. I'd love to have my hero have to fight for the ring after someone tries to steal it from him and steal his lady love at the same time....

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Danielle. . . Hmmm. . .Can Laresa come out of her ring on her own free will? This is something we've never discussed either. She's simply has always stayed in her ring never coming out without being accidently turned. Is your man going to turn the ring at all?

I don't have a problem with the "watchers", I just want to make sure it doesn't "clutter" the story hapazdly and get lost. Another cheat sheet?

I did for a moment lapse and death is right, the implication that his character knew about Laresa is there, so that would be a good lead in for the group to be mentioned, and I can quickly add a line about it to Horace's communication with Hanna.

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Lastly. . .I want to thank all of you for writing in this chain story and taking the time to discuss things and input your opinions, I know the others will too, they just aren't online yet. Everyone is doing great and this is not at all hard to organize. I'm loving these individual stories and I know the readers are too. I was sad to see my other Chain end, but happy too, because it was a real romance novel story and was written by great folks, new to chains and new to writing stories.

Story chapters were mentioned in Dark's post and we ended Dry Valley at Ch. 20. But I see this one going a little farther than that, as long as we keep it focused on story and not just random acts of sex.

 

[Guest]

Danielle. . . Hmmm. . .Can Laresa come out of her ring on her own free will? This is something we've never discussed either. She's simply has always stayed in her ring never coming out without being accidently turned. Is your man going to turn the ring at all?

I don't have a problem with the "watchers", I just want to make sure it doesn't "clutter" the story hapazdly and get lost. Another cheat sheet?

I did for a moment lapse and death is right, the implication that his character knew about Laresa is there, so that would be a good lead in for the group to be mentioned, and I can quickly add a line about it to Horace's communication with Hanna.

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Lastly. . .I want to thank all of you for writing in this chain story and taking the time to discuss things and input your opinions, I know the others will too, they just aren't online yet. Everyone is doing great and this is not at all hard to organize. I'm loving these individual stories and I know the readers are too. I was sad to see my other Chain end, but happy too, because it was a real romance novel story and was written by great folks, new to chains and new to writing stories.

Story chapters were mentioned in Dark's post and we ended Dry Valley at Ch. 20. But I see this one going a little farther than that, as long as we keep it focused on story and not just random acts of sex.

It was a ring, golden with a huge amber stone that sparkled under the torturous rays of the sun.

“Pretty,” he mumbled, unconsciously slipping it on his finger. It fit as if made for him, turning when his hand slumped back to the sand as his eyes slipped closed.

I thought of that... When I get more of it done I'd like to ship it to you Red. I sent it to Dark but I don't think he's around yet, and since then I added to the back story of Matthew a little more as to why he's in the desert stumbling around on his own.

I love doing this chain story. The first one was fun with finding slang for the era I did. This one, I'm striving towards conflict with my hero now standing up not only for himself, evil uncle syndrome, but for Laresa as well as she has demons of her own to battle. Thanks for coming up with the idea, Red, I have to say it was a good one.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

I thought of that... When I get more of it done I'd like to ship it to you Red. I sent it to Dark but I don't think he's around yet, and since then I added to the back story of Matthew a little more as to why he's in the desert stumbling around on his own.

I love doing this chain story. The first one was fun with finding slang for the era I did. This one, I'm striving towards conflict with my hero now standing up not only for himself, evil uncle syndrome, but for Laresa as well as she has demons of her own to battle. Thanks for coming up with the idea, Red, I have to say it was a good one.

I'd be happy and look forward to reading it. You're welcome. I did a genie SRP and loved it so much and then the writer disappeared, and I so missed the genie story because it was so much fun. This is completely different, but just as much fun and exciting. You guys are great and I'm happy its taken off so well. *hugs to everyone* es too.

 

[Guest]

I'd be happy and look forward to reading it. You're welcome. I did a genie SRP and loved it so much and then the writer disappeared, and I so missed the genie story because it was so much fun. This is completely different, but just as much fun and exciting. You guys are great and I'm happy its taken off so well. *hugs to everyone* es too.

I'm going to show off my forum illiteracy and ask...what's an SRP?

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

I'm going to show off my forum illiteracy and ask...what's an SRP?

Sexual Role Play, but they also have ORP - Online Role Play. They have the forums here on Lit. Writers write a character and carry them back and forth through a story. SOME suck and are strickly there for people to get off, others have real plots and are excellent. Here are two of my favorites.

Lust of Tortuga - Still being roleplayed.

Curse of the Travelers' - Finished and completed story.

 

[deathlynx]

Hmmm, it's possible that the "watchers" (*they need a name if we're flying with them) have some way to avoid genie detection...I was mostly thinking they opperate in crowds mostly where a genie would have to be actively searching for them to find 'em...and if they didn't know about them to begin with they couldn't search
Of course out in a dessert would be the perfect way to slip up and reveal yourself to a genie...And this particular one could easily be one of the less benevolant ones, providing you with you antagonist...

And I must agree, this has been amazingly fun...I'm still not sure I could handle a more traditional chain story but this is perfect...I keep getting inspired for a new story before the previous is even fully written...Thank you so much for the concept!


(*"Society of Djiin" perhaps?)