Save our sphincters!!

[Domesticity]

Sure. You talk. I'll go write a story that isn't put together by committee or written to your individual specifications.

Will you promise to use sphincter in the title? I love me some Wayne--any excuse to think of Mike Meyers

 

[sr71plt]

Sure, if you'll write an essay for Literotica explaining that you are the only reader here, so you're going to tell us all what to write.

 

[lovecraft68]

Sure, if you'll write an essay for Literotica explaining that you are the only reader here, so you're going to tell us all what to write.

Well apparently you're the only author here so this sounds like a win win deal you have going here.

But I like the idea of you writing a sphincter story you could call it an autobiography.

 

[sethp]

I don't think I've ever used that word. It's not an erotic word to me or for me. I'm really not that into anal sex. I have no idea why a used to write so much of it. Okay...yeah I do. It's all Busty Jessica's fault but she did help jump start my writing. In real life it hasn't been very enjoyable to the women I've been with.

 

[sr71plt]

For the record I don't use the word much either (I've already posted on this thread that it's a word I'd avoid just because I'd have to look the spelling up in the dictionary and that would disrupt the flow of my writing).

What I've been posting here is to what I see as the sort of arrogant, self-centered "I like/don't like" postings on writing as if every author writing stories for Literotica is dedicated to pleasing that one individual reader--or even should be.

I think the writers should write what/how they like and the readers should search for the works of the writers who write what pleases them--that the readers are responsible for what they read and it doesn't all have to cater to them individually to avoid being criticized on the forum.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Since I write exclusively in gay male, it is almost always a chore to decide what terms to use when anal sex is involved. "Rectum" has never ever been a consideration, and I think I only caved in to use "sphincter" once...and then slapped myself silly after seeing it on the screen after the story posted. Made me feel as if the hot lead-in I had written, had suddenly turned into a junior high health class lecture.

(note to self: stop using "rosebud" in your stories or Laurel will never award you a green 'E')

Agree completely but have you tried 'puckered rosebud' ?

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Well, yes, a quirk of the forum is that there are folks here who think that there are lots of rules to writing erotica and that the rules are mostly based on their own specific preferences. That's amusing, but what is more amusing is that many of those same folks don't actually post erotica here--or haven't in years. (The OP case in point.) Go figure.

Nonsense. As Laurel said, there are anatomical terms which don't seem to go with writing erotica. This is nothing to do with 'rules'.

I lost a lot of my joie de vivre with the exodus of great Lit writers who were also fun and contributed greatly to the fun and help on this forum. Cynical and barbed comments from the likes of you and scouries are anathema (look that up in your Webster's) to new writers.

I am encouraged to post my Val Day story this weekend, now you have promised not to read it. Not that it is bad. I'd prefer not to have your smudgy fingers on my work.

 

[sr71plt]

I am encouraged to post my Val Day story this weekend, now you have promised not to read it. Not that it is bad. I'd prefer not to have your smudgy fingers on my work.

Yeah, I've been looking for that one to go up (you've said you had stories you were going to post over the past eight years, and didn't do so, so I'm not holding my breath on this one). I'm sure it will be a good one--since you've been working on that next story to post for eight years now.

And, yes, I promise not to read it. Is it another one on bra sizes? Will it be an anatomical lecture on sphincters (yes, I had to look the spelling up in the dictionary again)? Will it be in third person since you've counseled fledgling writers not to try first person? Will we all applaud you for actually posting something after eight years of being a self-proclaimed Literotica story writing guru without posting anything yourself? Shall we hold a press conference when it finally drops? Are you expecting a brass band and confetti?

 

[Asilah_Katavol]

Just have to say this...

All during my childhood and my teenage years, I was told there would never be a serious discussion about the rectal region. So rather simply, hehe.

And although I doubt I have any right to say anything due to the fact I'm still awaiting my first story to be accepted... As long as the writer is happy with the word, should it really matter?

 

[sr71plt]

As long as the writer is happy with the word, should it really matter?

Ah, someone who gets the point.

 

[lovecraft68]

All during my childhood and my teenage years, I was told there would never be a serious discussion about the rectal region. So rather simply, hehe.

And although I doubt I have any right to say anything due to the fact I'm still awaiting my first story to be accepted... As long as the writer is happy with the word, should it really matter?

That would depend on how seriously the author would take the feedback.

I would imagine there would be some remarks about it not exactly being a sexy word choice. But if the author is no thin skinned and doesn't care then that's what matters.

My opinion is I wouldn't use it and it would be like hitting a speedbump if I read it. I would be "Wait, what?"

But that's me. I also can't see myself giving a low vote or wasting a comment on it either.

 

[lovecraft68]

Yeah, I've been looking for that one to go up (you've said you had stories you were going to post over the past eight years, and didn't do so, so I'm not holding my breath on this one). I'm sure it will be a good one--since you've been working on that next story to post for eight years now.

And, yes, I promise not to read it. Is it another one on bra sizes? Will it be an anatomical lecture on sphincters (yes, I had to look the spelling up in the dictionary again)? Will it be in third person since you've counseled fledgling writers not to try first person? Will we all applaud you for actually posting something after eight years of being a self-proclaimed Literotica story writing guru without posting anything yourself? Shall we hold a press conference when it finally drops? Are you expecting a brass band and confetti?

My personal preference would be an author who doesn't post a story if they feel they don't have one worth posting to someone who floods the site with an endless bunch of previously written stories that dried up on the paid market and act like they are really writing 2-3 stories a week.

I hope Elfin scores better than you in the contest.

It shouldn't be hard.

 

[sr71plt]

Can't you just feel the frustrated hatred dripping off his chin?

squeal, squeal, little piggy.

If you wanted folks to believe that my stories are substandard just because you said so, LC, you needed to be a whole lot smarter and more subtle in your hate campaign years before now. Beyond the fact that attacking the stories of others on this forum is just about as low in the gutter as someone can go, your campaign on that is laughably empty.

 

[GPLockwood]

Guilty as charged! (Help?)

I still consider myself to be a fairly new author, although I've been writing for a few years when I can find the time and most of my work seems to have been more-or-less well-received. I'm still working on my first erotica story arc. In my most recently published chapter on Literotica, (Paranormal Research Club Ch. 8, http://www.literotica.com/s/paranormal-research-club-ch-08) I fear that I did, indeed, reference the dreaded, fap-sabotaging sphincters of doom. In the vernacular, most people seem to use the singular form of the word to refer to both the internal and external anal sphincters, and I remember being concerned that veering away from this norm might be distracting or off-putting to some readers. (In their defense, as some of you have mentioned, it really does feel like a single muscular ring while engaging in the act. At least to me, and at least with the partners I have had.) In places, I'm fairly certain that my use of the plural term made it into the final edit. While much of the plot is pure fantasy, of course, I do try to base as many of the details as possible from personal experience, and my wife and I do actually tend to think and talk in relatively clinical terms when making love. (She's a doctor, and that's just how we roll.) To me, I found the term "sphincters" useful in order to describe what anal sex feels like to me, with the muscular outside ring gripping more forcefully than the area inside of the rectum. Could a more experienced author who has read my story provide me with some useful feedback? Does the word work within this particular context, or is this bad enough that I should change it? Or am I just worrying too much? Thanks!

 

[sr71plt]

The level of language you used in that chapter made the more scientific words appropriate. I particularly noticed it in the use of "vulva." When you had a character use "pussy" instead, it seemed to deflate the richness of the level of language you were using and came as an off-putting jolt. I think the level of the language of the piece (and the sophistication of the characters) has quite a bit to do with proper word choices.

 

[GPLockwood]

Thank you!

 

[sr71plt]

I hope Elfin scores better than you in the contest.

It shouldn't be hard.

I don't doubt that elfin might score better than I do in a contest--especially with you helping with the vote manipulation--but it's really, really hard for her do so if she doesn't actually enter the contest.

This is an old technique of elfin's to try keep fooling folks about her credentials for telling how they should write erotica and submit it to Literotica. She pretends she actually does this herself.

Elfin hasn't posted a story to Literotica for nine years and one month, and she only has four stories to her credit (and, no, she hasn't posted stories and then withdrawn them--I've watched her file that entire time).

She's said she was entering a contest before but hasn't done so for nearly a decade. (She has, though admonished me for not entering contests, when I've done so for nearly every contest since she stopped entering them. )

 

[TotalKnockout]

Nailed it

I really don't see the point of all this. We know every reader responds differently. It's impossible to please everyone. You can play to average tastes, but it's still hit or miss. I like seeing "sphincter" or "penis" in stories. You can only say "cock" so many times before it becomes annoying, and "ass" is too general and vague when you're trying to describe a good anal plundering. And for those of you that have been on the receiving end of anal, you know every inch of penetration brings with it a different feeling. It's hard to describe without referring to those muscles at the entrance with some form of reference. More annoying to me is when an author just says "he put his dick in my ass." I can read that on a bathroom wall. I need more.

I totally agree with this. I've only just started posting my stories on this site (although I'm no novice at writing erotica) and I've definitely used the word sphincter once or twice. I'm sure you all would agree that when a writer is describing any sexual/sensual act in detail, variety becomes essential. I can't tell you how many times I have googled "asshole synonyms" (try it, it's hilarious) when I'm multiple paragraphs into an extended anal sex scene and I'm running out of synonyms. True, 'Sphincter' is very awkward, technical-sounding word, but sometimes you need a certain word to emphasize a specific aspect or mood or feeling. If you're talking about the feeling of sliding through that tight ring, it might do the trick. (Come to think of it, "tight ring" might also do the trick...

It's not the sexiest word, granted, but sometimes I've been surprised by which words turn me on in the context of a well-written, really hot story. The most technical or even crass terms can be a surprising turn-on because they are technical and crass. I hate hate hate the word "twat" and sometimes I use it (sparingly) because it's such a gross, crass word, and "tight twat" has some fantastic alliteration going. The right word is the right word. Do I think I would like to read a story where "sphincter" is the go-to term every time an asshole is mentioned? Hell no. That's uncreative, inaccurate and a little bizarre. But I would much prefer one or two well-placed sphincters to a whole sea of assholes.

Take that for what you will...

I just think it's dangerous to say that certain words should never be used in the context of erotic writing. Never say never is a good credo in sex, and in writing about it.

 

[hard4hijabis]

how descriptive would you want it to be

"I felt the smoothness of his cockhead as he pushed it between my asscheeks and when it touched my wrinkled hole, i felt my knees quiver. He pushed it inside opening my sphincter and i felt his manhood invade my rectum"

Of course, if its a quickie in the office, it'd be "he fucked my ass and i screamed as he shot his hot cum into me"

depends on how much time you've got when you're wanking........

 

[sr71plt]

I agree with Totalknockout. There's too much of an effort here from certain folks to get everyone to write like they would (if they actually wrote and posted stories here).

 

[lovecraft68]

I can't tell you how many times I have googled "asshole synonyms" (try it, it's hilarious)

I just did and came up with this

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=721539&page=bio

Guess google is more accurate than I thought.

Talk about someone trying to tell everyone his way is the right way

 

[drinkz]

......

 

[Phantasy_Star]

sr71plt is cool.