Rejected?

[NuclearFairy]

I read most of the story in question. The line isn't an internal thought. It's part of the first person narrative. That's fairly clear in the snippet in the OP.

Yes, but his question was about internal thoughts.

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

I read most of the story in question. The line isn't an internal thought. It's part of the first person narrative. That's fairly clear in the snippet in the OP.

It's the character's thoughts being typed out, the character is thinking those things, recalling them to herself.

 

[ronde]

I've never had one rejected!

The blurb is there about dialog, but I don't see an issue.

I made no secret of being married. My rings were very prominent and my husband visited the office a few times and attended a few company events. Still, one of the peacocks was not quite getting the hint and played the chase the tail game with me being the tail. He didn't seem to know what ‘No!’ meant and I was starting to get annoyed. It was almost daily that he made some kind of a pass.​

That paragraph had a double quote around No, but that wouldn't kill a whole submission, would it?

I'm ashamed to admit it, but I've had a couple stories rejected for dialogue formatting. When I edited the story again, it was all my fault. The problem was a lack of a closing quotation mark or marks in the dialogue. This is pure conjecture on my part, but I think Literotica uses some form of software to convert what we submit in the submission form into what Literotica displays. The conversion looks for where to start a new line of dialogue by looking for that trailing quotation mark. If it's not there, the story won't display in a readable form and that results in the rejection.

Here's an example of what I'm trying to say.

"You never pay any attention to me.

"Yes I do, you just don't notice."

I walked away then.

In this case, the preceding quote mark on the second piece of dialogue looks like the trailing quotation mark on the first piece of dialogue. Trying to fit that into readable text is impossible. You end up with something that looks like this:

"You never pay any attention to me."

Yes I do, you just don't notice. "I walked away then.

It's a simple thing to find. Just search your document for a quotation mark, then make sure you closed each piece of dialogue before you started writing anything else.

I've never had a rejection for enclosing words or phrases with either double or single quotes. It's also not necessary to define a character's internal thoughts in some manner as long as it's obvious which character is having those thoughts. Just add a preliminary sentence like, Betty had to think about that, and then just write her thoughts like you would any other text.

By the way, the text in all the rejections is just boilerplate generated by the conversion/checking software. It isn't an actual rejection by Laurel.

 

[Writer61]

I had one rejected recently for dialogue. It was a compilation of two parts of a previously published story. It was approved after correction.

The thing is that the errors that caused the new version to fail were present in the old versions.

 

[M_K_Babalon]

I use Libre Office with Liberation Sans 14 pt.

It's generally clean and easy to read, but I guess I can try others.

You can just zoom on the page.