Read my first story, and send me feedback.

[lomu]

My story is in my opinion, great, but not everyone will agree with me, so read it and send me constructive criticism, especially ladies, because I value your opinions much more highly than those of men, as you are so much harder to please and easier to offend when it comes to erotica, please, feel free to rip the shit out of me, and my story, but I would much prefer some valuable ideas and pointers, so come on guys, read it. , damn I love that smilie.

 

[Debbie]

A link to your story!

http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=29904


It might be a better idea to try this in the story/poetry feedback forum.

O my lord Laurel has been here! LOL This was in the story discussion circle forum! Geez that is freaky!