Poem...What do ya think?

[Guest]

You Are My Cyber Fantasy
Glowing Green & Blue
Arms & Legs
Fingers & Tongues
Cocks & Clits
Reaching Through
The Cyber Lands

There But Not, Close
Typing, Not Even Talking
Opens Your World
To The Cyber Lands

Hungry For Your Body
But Faced With
Your Cyber Fantasy

Does It Suck? I Have No Idea! LOL
Lie Pretty Lies For Me. Wait! Tell Me The Truth.

 

[DarlingBri]

Yes, it sucks.

Don't ask questions to which you are not prepared to hear all the answers.

 

[Guest]

Thanks

I Am Prepared. You Had Your Say. Thank You Much.

Bri?
Do You Have A Poem?
Where Can I Read It?

Do You Often Talk To Your Dairy Products That Way? LOL

 

[MinkSoul]

you asked"does it suck?"....

i'd have to answer: Yes....


if you asked "What do you think?"

i'd answer: it was confusing and left me not caring one way or the other...


next time might i suggest asking the second question?

 

[DarlingBri]

Yes....

I have a poem, it's on my website, buried in the Word Lover > Writings section, but there. It's buried because it's not good, but it's there because it's meaningful to me.

And yes, I often talk to my dairy products. Doesn't everyone?

 

[SimplySouthern]

You asked.....I'll answer.

That poem did nothing for me, but did it suck? I don't think so. I am assuming of course that you had some sort of motivation for writing it. Perhaps this is your outlet, I dunno.

At any rate, you have a couple of options. If this is the reflection of a cyber love affair you are carrying on, I would give it a little more thought and try to really relate how it makes you feel. As it stands, it's a little jumbled and too abstract to really allow the reader to enjoy it. If this isn't some indication of the feelings inside you, I would suggest writing about something that is. Find a subject near and dear to your heart and put it "to paper". I think you'll find that easier.

Good Luck, hope to hear more from you.

 

[TonyG]

Pretty bad and I am by no means a poet.


Bri...you crack me up at times.

 

[Svedish_Chef]

Re: You asked.....I'll answer.

At any rate, you have a couple of options. If this is the reflection of a cyber love affair you are carrying on, I would give it a little more thought and try to really relate how it makes you feel. As it stands, it's a little jumbled and too abstract to really allow the reader to enjoy it. If this isn't some indication of the feelings inside you, I would suggest writing about something that is. Find a subject near and dear to your heart and put it "to paper". I think you'll find that easier.

Good Luck, hope to hear more from you.

Something near to my heart SS...

Like a certain poem?

Suddenly sensual... naah shit you were always that

 

[DarlingBri]

Bri...you crack me up at times.

Strange... I have a pint of milk here that just said the exact same thing to me.

The world is filled with miracles.

 

[SimplySouthern]

Re: Re: You asked.....I'll answer.

Something near to my heart SS...

Like a certain poem?

Precisely what I meant. If anyone wants to read a great poem, ask this man. He's got skillz. (Sorry, couldn't help myself)

 

[Svedish_Chef]

Re: Re: Re: You asked.....I'll answer.

Something near to my heart SS...

Like a certain poem?

Precisely what I meant. If anyone wants to read a great poem, ask this man. He's got skillz. (Sorry, couldn't help myself)

Ask me what?

How to lose someone special... now that I could probably teach.

Long time no see... time for MSN today? (Being easter and all)