Paragraph help please.

[VincentC]

I have some stories that i can't get through due to paragraph issues. I think it's the way I'm making the characters speak. My previous editor stopped responding, guessing something came up.

BTW, I also having issues with my tense, switch between past and present. Anybody want to help me out?

 

[PennLady]

If you send me a PM, I can give you an email to send a story to and I'll look it over.

 

[VincentC]

Thank you!