oUR FIRST SOFT SWING

[mannydcamp]

Hi All,

I am trying to write part two to a story I wrote called our first soft swing. I would love getting ideas if anyone has any.



http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=15745


Thanks


Mannydcamp

 

[Charly]

Hmmmmmmm, to me it seems like you told the whole story without taking a breath. Also, it isn't exactly a "soft swing" is it?

Just a suggestion, break it into two parts and do part one as a softer swing, lingering over the details, the sights, the sounds, the sensual feelings, then you can write a great part two.

Hope this helps.