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LaJovena

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http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=343632&page=1

Okay, I've been away for a while, but now I'm back and I've submitted the second chapter of Sweet Maggie. Please go over and take a look. Votes and honest feedback are always appreciated. I am particularly appreciative of constructive criticism that will help me to improve my writing.

Thanks!!!!

LaJovena

Also, I don't know why the font changes back and forth. I submitted it as a Word document because I used italics, and that's what we got back. I guess in the future, I'll just submit straight text in the submit box.
 
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Ok, I've had one private feedback on Sweet Maggie 2 that is basically asking what happened to the rest of the story? My answer is that there is a third chapter (and I promise I won't wait 2 years to submit it!)

It might help to understand why I left chapter 2 where I did if you read chapter 1. (Seems kind of obvious, I know.) It's a somewhat fast-paced story, I think, and shouldn't take much time to read. Here's a link to chapter 1: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=213761

Here is some of the feedback I got from the first chapter:

Man on a high-wire
Poor fucker never had a chance. Tried to do the right thing and wound up putting his thing right where he shouldn't. Oh shit! I hate it when that happens. NOT! A really hot and heavy tale. Well done.

wonderful!
One of the best I've ever read!! Hope to see more like this soon.

Ve-rry good!
The build up was so tantalising. His worry was so real. And when he took her - ooo, I felt so good with him!
DO write some more as good as that.

Exquisitely woven tale!
Arousing in every way. You engage all the senses and pace your story well. I especially appreciate the way you treat the emotional/sensual complexity with such simplicity and directness. I do hope there's more

Well done
Extremely well written, and very enjoyable. Keep up the good work.

So I'd really like to hear some feedback with the 2nd chapter.

Is it paced well? Believable? Confusing? Boring? (God, I hope not!) How do you feel about the direction it's taken? Did anything disappoint you?

Let me have it!

:-D

LaJovena
 
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