Okay... Need some advice, opinions, whatever, over here...

[BedtimeStories77]

And I need 'em fast!!! I'm gonna give a "last minute" try at that damn Christmas contest after all! *crossing fingers and wishing myself luck!* lol (I finally got an idea in my head that I think is good and maybe not "so standard" on Lit. *crossing fingers again* )

The loose opening is of two college lovers saying a brief "goodbye" before heading to their homes/hometowns for the holidays. One, as always, is worried about some possible family conflict.

I also plan to have a "quick" sex scene around the opening of the story. (And I don't want to give away a lot of details, so that's why I haven't said more! )

What I'm wondering is, should I have the sex scene at the very beginning, and then the couple talking about the one's "worries"... OR ...should the couple be discussing the problem, which leads to a comforting hug, some caresses, etc...





C'mon, hurry up and tell me! My time is running out! lol

 

[sexymom]

I'm for beginning with the sex scene- more intense and wanton than usual for them, due to the impending separation hanging over their heads. Then there is the postcoital conversation about families, holidays, etc.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Thank you for adding your two cents, Sexymom.

 

[Tom Collins]

I cast my vote with sexymom. Maybe even start right in the middle of it. Hit um right in the nads w/o any warning.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Hit um right in the nads w/o any warning.

lol

So, describing it with the climax actually being near? (Anyone know/remember from reading if other stories on Lit have ever started this way before?)

 

[Tom Collins]

Yeah, that's exactly what I mean.
As to your question, I don't know cuz I ain't been here very long, and frankly have been spending most of my time on the boards.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

As to your question, I don't know cuz I ain't been here very long, and frankly have been spending most of my time on the boards.

Well, shame on you! lol

Now, go to the "bad Newbie corner" and think about what you've done!! Or, um, haven't done in this case.

 

[Tom Collins]

LARF
I'm just trying like hell to be able to have an AV like all the cool kids, mum.
And the only way to do that is to post like a freakin' deamon.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

LARF
I'm just trying like hell to be able to have an AV like all the cool kids, mum.
And the only way to do that is to post like a freakin' deamon.

There are more boards than only Story Ideas.


Okay, back to making this thread serious now. lol Other people, gimme your opinions!!!!

 

[sirhugs]

I would introduce the characters, then go straight to mid sex scene. I have done this, it works well- like a movie.

Save the climazx until the end when you finish the flashback, but you can open "close".

 

[BedtimeStories77]

I would introduce the characters, then go straight to mid sex scene. I have done this, it works well- like a movie.

Save the climazx until the end when you finish the flashback, but you can open "close".

Hmmm... I wasn't thinking of a "flashback" for this story. I do love the idea, but don't think it'll fit for what I have in mind.

Okay, how would I "introduce" the characters before making it obvious they're having sex? lol

 

[TheCaptain]

What I myself have done in the past... and my opinion on the way you might want to go

Hmmm, well with the Unexpected Benefits series I did a couple of years back now, I introduced an issue of conflict which has set the main character up to be in a foul mood, then gone on in paragraph four or five to introduce his wife and describe her as she's giving him a blowie, leading into some make-up sex... from there launched into a sex scene for about half of the first page.

I don't really think it matters how you work things out, to have them discussing issues post-sex or before the action is, either way, quite possible and plausible. But I think to have the sex first is the better way to go, hit the readers from the start with what they want

Capt

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Capt, if my readers want "more than just sex" I'll have to kick you in the butt for telling me to start with the sex first! lol

 

[TheCaptain]

Capt, if my readers want "more than just sex" I'll have to kick you in the butt for telling me to start with the sex first! lol

Hey, wouldn't be my fault if the rest of the story's lacking, eh?

I'm not sayin "sex and nothing else...." damnit! Thou, with a couple of my stories so far, that seems to have worked

Just sayin like the others, draw em in with a bit of sex at the start, if whatever the issue of conflict/resolution is is compelling enough, they'll stay cause the hook has got 'em good

Capt

 

[sirhugs]

Hmmm... I wasn't thinking of a "flashback" for this story. I do love the idea, but don't think it'll fit for what I have in mind.

Okay, how would I "introduce" the characters before making it obvious they're having sex? lol

It could work to start

"How did I end up fucking [insert name] when I supposed to just be seeing her off for the holidays?"

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Hey, wouldn't be my fault if the rest of the story's lacking, eh?

I'm not sayin "sex and nothing else...." damnit! Thou, with a couple of my stories so far, that seems to have worked

Just sayin like the others, draw em in with a bit of sex at the start, if whatever the issue of conflict/resolution is is compelling enough, they'll stay cause the hook has got 'em good

Capt

Oh hush! You knew I was just teasing you anyway!



P.S.
Even after the "first" sex, there will be more.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

It could work to start:

"How did I end up fucking [insert name] when I supposed to just be seeing her off for the holidays?"

Oh, well, the two in the opening are already lovers. And partner B isn't going to be a main character. Only partner A and family...

 

[TheCaptain]

Oh hush! You knew I was just teasing you anyway!



P.S.
Even after the "first" sex, there will be more.

'course I did, babe . And ya gotta know I was just 'tease-rantin' bak

Good to hear about that... the more the merrier!

Capt

 

[TheCaptain]

Oh, well, the two in the opening are already lovers. And partner B isn't going to be a main character. Only partner A and family...

Ohhh, family eh....? *perk*

Capt

 

[BedtimeStories77]

'course I did, babe . And ya gotta know I was just 'tease-rantin' bak

Good to hear about that... the more the merrier!

Ohhh, family eh....? *perk*

Capt

lol Silly boy.