Mark James
Experienced
- Joined
- Nov 1, 2004
- Posts
- 40
Hi:
I'm new to Literotica and I've just posted a fairly long short story. It falls into the category of Gay BDSM. It's posted in the Gay Male category.
I'm posting here because the opportunity to get genuine feedback is a rarity for most writers.
Please be warned, this story is not mainstream, nor is it intended to be. It's a heavy duty S&M story that involves sex between two men.
My goal is to write gay generational stories about powerful men who love to make other men their "boys". Basically, I write about a Daddy and boy kind of relationship. I mean "Daddy" in the sense in which it is used in the world of S&M, not incest. The setting is in a fantasy world. All my slaveboy characters are intended to be at least eighteen years old.
If any of the topics above offend you, DON'T read my story. You won't like it.
However, if you like your stories on the very rough side, please feel free to read it and let me know what you think.
If it's not too much trouble, I'm particularly interested in finding out the answers to questions like, after reading it, did you feel that the characters were given enough depth for you to understand what motivated their actions?
What confused you about the world?
Was the writing itself clear enough to convey the story?
To anyone who takes the time to read it (11,000 words!), thank you in advance.
Again, this story is NOT mainstream. Please do not read it if you are offended by male/male sex, humliation, BDSM, discipline or very rough sex.
Here's the link:
http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=169742
The story name is "Assassins After Dark".
Thanks for your time and support
Mark James
I'm new to Literotica and I've just posted a fairly long short story. It falls into the category of Gay BDSM. It's posted in the Gay Male category.
I'm posting here because the opportunity to get genuine feedback is a rarity for most writers.
Please be warned, this story is not mainstream, nor is it intended to be. It's a heavy duty S&M story that involves sex between two men.
My goal is to write gay generational stories about powerful men who love to make other men their "boys". Basically, I write about a Daddy and boy kind of relationship. I mean "Daddy" in the sense in which it is used in the world of S&M, not incest. The setting is in a fantasy world. All my slaveboy characters are intended to be at least eighteen years old.
If any of the topics above offend you, DON'T read my story. You won't like it.
However, if you like your stories on the very rough side, please feel free to read it and let me know what you think.
If it's not too much trouble, I'm particularly interested in finding out the answers to questions like, after reading it, did you feel that the characters were given enough depth for you to understand what motivated their actions?
What confused you about the world?
Was the writing itself clear enough to convey the story?
To anyone who takes the time to read it (11,000 words!), thank you in advance.
Again, this story is NOT mainstream. Please do not read it if you are offended by male/male sex, humliation, BDSM, discipline or very rough sex.
Here's the link:
http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=169742
The story name is "Assassins After Dark".
Thanks for your time and support
Mark James
