New Story

[Sexysmith76]

I've just submitted a new story call 'Jo and the Silk Scarf' and would be grateful for any feedback anyone could give.

 

[Sexysmith76]

New Story has been posted

The new story has been posted online and can be accessed via the link below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/s...y.php?id=157325

If you have any feedback be good, bad or indifferent, email me via my profile page.

 

[Sexysmith76]

It seems the link doesn't work. Anyway, the story's called 'Jo and the Silk Scarf' so please have a look and give me your feedback be it good, bad or indifferent.

 

[elrod]

Fair smithy - I burnt the supper!
Little bit more tension and build up with the dildo - seemed to get straight to the action, she should writh and anticipate, not just come!
But then I am no author. E.

 

[Pure]

SS, you probably want the 'story feedback' forum or the 'author's hangout forum.'