new story

[lilguy]

chyoo cross over Two


sense the first one failed HARD!!

here another try with a large variety of story

In the prequel sectiong of it. It has GASP..chacter development. In a Lilguy story no less with a 18 year old beth. I mean it actully has A PLOT

AMMAZING

 

[bungakawa2000]

I know we've picked on you a lot because of your spelling problems...

You've improved a lot, but I still can't understand why you don't use an automated spell checker...

Just for fun, I pasted the first two paragraphs of your "she spys" thread in Word and the following words were caught by the spell checker:

orgnazation
orgnazaitong
assians
intergator
ammazon
shawow
detiny

That's a minimum of one mispelled word per line. Some of these appear more than once, so the count is even higher than that... And that's just spelling mistakes, not including the (more sneaky) grammatical mistakes (they're-their-there kinda thing)...

Honestly, you've said already you suffer from some form of dyslexia. I can't expect you (or anybody else for that matter, including me) to catch every little faulty detail. But there are tools out there to help with that task.

Don't take this as a bash. I simply think reading your threads would be much more pleasant if you used all the tools readily available to you...

Bunga

 

[niceguy2002tim]

Editor Bunga?

Humm...
here's an idea. Maybe Lilguy should team up with Bunga and create some great stories. Who better to help edit Lilguy's threads? I think it would be a good learning thing... Say lilguy writes the thread in word then sends it to you and you edit it, and anything you fix or correct, you should use red font colour so lilguy knows where his mistakes are. Am I on to something?

Lilguy's stories might just kick ass if edited properly. I think everybody needs an editor. Hell, I do too! Usually I re-read my work later on down the line and notice things that I missed.

-Tim (niceguy2002tim)

 

[lilguy]

fixed

 

[Wyldnight]

I wonder if these spelling mistakes are contagious. j/k I'm the same way with my stories, Tim. When I re-read them, I find more mistakes than when I first read them.

I also believe that everyone should use a program with a spellchecker when they write their stories or threads for other people's stories. There is a higher probability that the threads will be approved if you use a spellchecker. And the stories will be better received with fewer spelling mistakes.

One other thing that I've been thinking about lately concerning the stories on chyoo. It's my opinion that the stories will be better received if they are longer than five paragraphs. I mean, it's really annoying to start reading a story that sounded really interesting and that had several threads to it, only to find out that most of the threads consist of three words. Such as "he fucks her."

What is up with that? I mean, doesn't chyoo have ANY standards? But, oh well. Hmmm. I do seem to rant a lot on here. Don't I? I'll try to temper my posts from now on. As little complaining as I can manage.

James
(aka PheylonFirestorm)

 

[deathofcards]

This is one of the reasons I write everything using word as it checks everything as you write it, that can be annoying but I find it saves me time correcting the error as soon as I spot it rather than going through the whole thing. Aside from that I suspect there are one or two errors in my threads, which slip past me.

My threads tend to vary in length my two most recent ones for Road Trip and Highschool fantasy were fairly short, and then I've written other ones which have been about five pages long.

 

[lilguy]

all these post let no additions to the story

YOU BASTARDS