New Story: Yet another alien planet story

[yoyo1342]

Hello everyone. I'm continuing work on Yet another high school story, but I'm starting work on a new one, Yet another alien planet story. As with my high school story, I'm not breaking any new ground here, just taking certain ideas that I like and putting them together in a readable story.

I'm hoping to get this one approved without the same fuss as last time, so if you're a moderator and you've got a minute, it'd be great if you could take a look at it.

Thanks a ton!

Here's the link...

http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/7421

Cheers,

Yoyo

 

[jakdago]

Well,the beginning of the story is very nice!i like very much this kind of stories!hope it will be approved soon!