New story - sex, bondage and livingroom furniture

[Teela]

Hi, all,

I've got a new story up here: http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=215853

It's called "The Sofa" and it's in Erotic Couplings. I would very much appreciate your feedback.

Thanks!

Teela

 

[Penelope Street]

Hi Teela,

Having read 'The Sofa', I confess I have mixed feelings about it. On one hand, the scene is described well enough I had no trouble following the action. One the other hand, without any surrounding story, I didn't understand who the characters were or why they chose to engage in a bit of loving living-room bondage, so I didn't find the action meaningful. Even so, there was a sweetness to the scene and I decided to have a look at one of your other stories.

For no particular reason, I chose 'The Samurai's Dream'. It still wasn't arousing, per se, but I enjoyed this tale far more. While the erotic scenes really weren't any better written than in 'The Sofa', they had a framing context that made them more meaningful. The ending was perfect. I think it might have been truly touching if the story had been a little longer and I'd gotten to know the characters better.

One ingredient that helps me get to know characters is dialogue. I perused all of your stories and didn't notice a single direct quote in any of them. Is there any reason for this? How someone speaks reveals much about who they are, both in real life and in fiction. This might be one reason I didn't feel in touch with the characters in either story. If you're considering including dialogue in your future stories, you might have a look at Ronde's essay 'Let The Characters Do The Talking':
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=122987

Hope that helps.

Take Care,
Penny