I'm just looking for a little feedback on my new series. Particularly I would like criticism on the writing and story flow. Can I work on my descriptive abilities? Does the story flow smoothly without jumping around?
It is hard to see a story you've written from a readers point of view because I know what is going on and what is going to happen. A big fear is that the reader will become confused and not have an enjoyable read. Thanks in advance!
This story is about a voyeuristic son home from college, who developes lustful feelings for his mother. So far two chapters are published.
https://literotica.com/s/mothers-window-ch-01
It is hard to see a story you've written from a readers point of view because I know what is going on and what is going to happen. A big fear is that the reader will become confused and not have an enjoyable read. Thanks in advance!
This story is about a voyeuristic son home from college, who developes lustful feelings for his mother. So far two chapters are published.
https://literotica.com/s/mothers-window-ch-01
