Need Help from established authors

[wayne1979]

Hi,
I'm about to start to write an erotic novel for my girlfriend, I have written short stories for her before but I have an idea for a more involved book.
I would love to have a couple of people to bounce ideas off and help generally in the wording of it.

I am trying to write the book from her point of view, which I seem to find hard as it always seems laddish. (not such a problem in short stories but in a longer book I'm sure she would soon lose interest).

Just as a start off, a Character in the book I see as female, tall, blonde and very beautiful. Mesmerising strong succesful assertive and confident.

How would you describe her if you were writing.

Any help would be greatly appreciated

Wayne
xx

 

[FallingToFly]

Feel free to bounce it off me, although I can't promise any kind of consistency in my responses- I get to things as I can.

You might consider joining up with Nano, and joining a couple groups for the feedback potential.

 

[wayne1979]

Thank you that would be a big help.
The general story will be
my partner meets a girl on a chatroom
The girl seduces my girlfriend into an affair.
My girlfriend becomes completely submissive to her.
Various games risks and general degrading of my girl
Girlfriends guilt of betraying me\love for this other woman
the twist tho is that I'm having an affair with the woman and have set it all up.

But the whole thing needs to be written from my girlfriends point of view.

When writing shorter stories I have ended up using the same words/descriptions repeatedly which can become quite monotonous.

Wayne

 

[bronzeage]

Hi,
I'm about to start to write an erotic novel for my girlfriend, I have written short stories for her before but I have an idea for a more involved book.
I would love to have a couple of people to bounce ideas off and help generally in the wording of it.

I am trying to write the book from her point of view, which I seem to find hard as it always seems laddish. (not such a problem in short stories but in a longer book I'm sure she would soon lose interest).

Just as a start off, a Character in the book I see as female, tall, blonde and very beautiful. Mesmerising strong succesful assertive and confident.

How would you describe her if you were writing.

Any help would be greatly appreciated

Wayne
xx

The easiest way to describe your woman is to start a scene with another character, seeing her for the first time. Put yourself in the eyes of the viewer and write what you see. This is chance to develope both character with an econmy of words.

Good luck.

 

[FallingToFly]

I'd really suggest third person for this. I can't see how first person is going to work, sweetheart.

 

[wayne1979]

Thank you both for your input!
3rd person does sound better.


Can i txt you both later when I've got my story started??


thankyou

Wayne
xx

 

[wayne1979]

5ts really hard to write from a females point of view