My second story series has started

[McUnts]

Hi again all,

Thank you for the constructive comments about my first story.

The first two parts of my latest series Something in the Air are up.
Something in the Air - Pt. 01
Something in the Air - Pt. 02

Tommy buys some vapourisers that promise to increase libido and reduce inhibitions. He tries them out on his parents.

Love to hear helpful thoughts, suggestions and praise !

McUnts

 

[OnlyHappyEndings]

Good writing, very readable. Not a lot of plot but that's okay. The continuous sexual activity are the important thing in stories like these. I like that you are taking time to build up to something and don't go from zero to three-way in sixty seconds. I like the voyeurism and the MC's obsession with his parents. I don't like that he is constantly wanking and ejaculating. It's possible to be turned on watching porn without coming three times in an hour.

I was a little concerned when the mother mentioned MC's friend being attracted to her. Like, hey man, you're setting your mother up to get railed by a bunch of teenagers. But then the father expresses interest in MC's girl friends and I'm like, hey, I guess it would be cool if they all had an orgy. The end of the second story teased that MC might go bi with his father. Seems like a natural progression. Others might disagree. I say, keep it light and give us a happy ending.

 

[McUnts]

Good writing, very readable. Not a lot of plot but that's okay. The continuous sexual activity are the important thing in stories like these. I like that you are taking time to build up to something and don't go from zero to three-way in sixty seconds. I like the voyeurism and the MC's obsession with his parents. I don't like that he is constantly wanking and ejaculating. It's possible to be turned on watching porn without coming three times in an hour.

I was a little concerned when the mother mentioned MC's friend being attracted to her. Like, hey man, you're setting your mother up to get railed by a bunch of teenagers. But then the father expresses interest in MC's girl friends and I'm like, hey, I guess it would be cool if they all had an orgy. The end of the second story teased that MC might go bi with his father. Seems like a natural progression. Others might disagree. I say, keep it light and give us a happy ending.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and for your positive comments and helpful suggestions.
Working on the next parts currently.