My Nude Day Contest Submission

caprine

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Sue: Her Night Out, has received criticism for stylistic confusion. The blindfolded Sue required a third character to describe action from time to time. I agree, in retrospect, it was confusing, but at the time of writing, I just hated to have her lose her blindfold. She should have lost it. Sight is so much a part of the sexual experience. The read would have been much more straight forward for the reader and, so much more pleasureable for Sue. This kind of constructive criticism is what feedback is all about. It helps an author learn about his/her mistakes and leads to subsequent improvement in writing skills.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=261362

My thanks to those who provided such useful feedback!
 
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