My head is spinning around this...

[Sunadmire]

I'm in two minds about the amount of detail I want to wrovide:
Background:
I've completed Chapter 5 (of 8) of a new series I'm working on. It still needs refinement.
Towards the end of this chapter (the first part is a build-up to this) the Main male character (MMC) impregnates his previous lover (A - twice), A's sister-in-law (B - once) and his faithfull and unsuspecting wife (C - twice) in ahort succession.
I've written very little of the detail of these events. e.g.:
I may stop at the point where the MMC's erection enters B's soaking wet pussy. Then continues where the MMC got dressed up while B was still laying on her back, with semen seeping out of her pussy, hoping to get as much sperm through her cervix before she cleans herself up.
My motivation to restrict the detail, is because I (hope that I have) left enough flesh so that the reader can fill in the missing detail. An expansion of the detail (in all five cases) may end up to contain a lot of similar action, which readers may find boring.
I'm now double guessing the wisdom to leave the action to the imagination of the reader. I can probably spice the action up by providing more detail.
Any ideas as to which way to go, or how to mix the two strategies.
Sun

 

[nice90sguy]

Not sure if you meant "impregnates" -- which means "make pregnant". I think you meant "has vaginal penetrative sexual intercourse with", but that might bloat your word count a bit.

 

[NotWise]

It's hard to say much without knowing more about the context. From what you described, that might be enough sex in a short span to make readers' eyes glaze over. If the erotic focus of the story is on something other than impregnating three women in short succession then you might be better off by not going into detail.

If that is the focus of the story, then you might have a bigger problem. I can think of two ways around it, and there are probably others. One would be to expand the text to spread the sex out. Another would be to (maybe) detail the first, and then go into the rest without detail, concentrating on what's different and how it feels rather than what is done.

Eroticism doesn't always require detail. Sometimes the idea is all it takes.

 

[gunhilltrain]

It's hard to say much without knowing more about the context. From what you described, that might be enough sex in a short span to make readers' eyes glaze over. If the erotic focus of the story is on something other than impregnating three women in short succession then you might be better off by not going into detail.

If that is the focus of the story, then you might have a bigger problem. I can think of two ways around it, and there are probably others. One would be to expand the text to spread the sex out. Another would be to (maybe) detail the first, and then go into the rest without detail, concentrating on what's different and how it feels rather than what is done.

Eroticism doesn't always require detail. Sometimes the idea is all it takes.

I would probably agree with this. Maybe you've got some differences in settings for these five acts that you could concentrate on instead? By the way, it would be nice if you put line spaces between the paragraphs so that your posts are easier to read.

 

[Sunadmire]

Thank you NotWise, I think you've given me some pointers to work with.
Sun

 

[Djmac1031]

Point of clarification: how does the MMC impregnate someone "twice" in "short succession?"

Did you mean they're just having sex? Or is he actually making them pregnant?

If you're writing this as separately published chapters, you can split the sex scenes between each chapter.

If it was one long story, too many long drawn out sex scenes might bore readers, but readers of chaptered series expect usually at least one major sex scene per chapter.

I hear you on writing repetitive sex scenes though, and my answer is yes, sometimes you can skip a lot of that detail, IF you make the setup, the premise that gets your characters there, interesting enough.

In the latest chapter of my long running series, I told a story about how my two main leads engaged in a little bit of exhibitionist fun with another couple; nothing but light flashing and later, some topless swimming.

After, they went home to have sex, but I didn't WRITE that scene at all, simply alluded to it.

Last thoughts: each character is different, or at least they should be.

If you have one main male lead fucking several different women, focus on the differences between them. Maybe one is shy and demure. Another more confident, experienced. Maybe one wants him badly, while another is less sure, almost reluctant, has to be convinced.

Then of course there's the variety in body types, and ways they respond to the sex itself.

Focus more on that and less on "Tab A goes into Slot B" and it'll definitely help keep your story fresher for you and your readers.

 

[Sunadmire]

Thank you Djmac1031.
I should have been clearer in my initial description of my problem. The 'short sucession' is within the plot/story, but happens over the span four years.
The two sisters-in-law are desperate to get pregnant, but their husbands (two brothers) have genetic low fertility issues - which get worse over time. They waited too long...
The events are providing context for a future event, where the five's paths ceoss and they discover that they have the same father.
I'll surely consider your suggestions.
Best regards
Sun