My Girlfriend's first story

XtremeLussier

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I told her it was good but she doesn't want to agree.
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Jessica sat across from me at the table. She was writing a poem. She was beautiful and blond. She had the most capturing blue eyes. She was 18 and going to be a senior in high school. I was only 14 and I was amazed that she was interested in me. I was dating her younger brother Jon. But Jessica let me know one day while she was helping me with my makeup that she was interested in being more than just my friend. Jessica closed her notebook and stared at me.
"It's almost time for lunch," she said.
"I know that," I told her.
"Let's do something crazy," she said.
"Like what," I asked her.
Jessica was a wild spirit, a bit of exhibitionist and she would do anything anywhere. I was falling in love with her though. When I asked her what it was she wanted to do she told me she wanted to have sex. That was nothing crazy I thought. We had done that several times before. She wanted explore the lesbian side of her sexuality and I was helping her do that. She was good too. I didn't have to depend on Jon's sloppy efforts at oral sex anymore. I was getting the best tongue around as far as I knew. She lifted up the table cloth. The carpet in the dining room was very soft and thick. I thought that odd for a dining room where children ate. What stains that carpet must see. Jessica was planning to put a stain other than food there.
"Come under the table with me," she said.
"Why," I asked her, acting like I didn't know.
"I want to lick you," she said.
"But lunch is pretty soon. This room will be full," I reminded her.
"That will be the crazy part," she informed me.
We both had skirts on that day so I agreed to go under the table with her. Once we were there we started kissing. She stopped me, told me that we had to be quiet if we were going to do it. I knew that we did. While we were making out she took my panties down a little and she stuck her fingers in me. She was massaging me everywhere down there while we kissed. I put one of my hands up her shirt and I unhooked her bra. I wanted to feel her breasts. They were only an A cup but they still felt good. Jesse was very small but she was still good at sex.
Jesse liked my pussy wet when she licked it. After she had gotten me wet enough for her taste with her finger she rolled me over easily onto my back. She finished taking off my panties. Once they were off I heard Bridget, their chef bringing lunch in. I got a little nervous then. Jesse told me to just calm down that we would not get caught.
I relaxed, and I closed my eyes and prepared to feel her tongue inside me. She pushed my legs apart and held my lips open with her small hands. She began to lick everywhere and it felt so good that I was trembling. I nearly made a sound then I glanced up at the solid oak surface and I remembered where we were. In fifteen minutes she had licked me dry. I had came twice while she was doing it. She liked it that way. Jesse always liked it the more wet I was. I wasn't like that so much. After she was done and lunch was halfway over we still hadn't been caught. She leaned back and whispered to me.
"Your turn," she said so no one would hear.
"Alright," I whispered back a little reluctant.
She had always told me that if I didn't want to do it, I didn't have to. I didn't want to now but there were two problems with that. We would have to wait for the family to finish lunch if we quit then and I would feel terrible if I got and did not give. I always did. So I took Jesse's panties off and I whispered to her to relax and get ready.
I had this thing that I did with my tongue that I knew she liked. I would just roll it up and once I stuck inside her I would turn it in a circle. She always told me it felt amazing. So as she laid with her legs spread open under the dining room table that is what I did for her. While I was doing it I could see the smile on her face. It was big and I was very happy that I was pleasing her so well.
While I was licking her juice after she came she grabbed my breasts and she began massaging them. She didn't usually do things like that but I liked it. Her hands were so soft and so delicate and they felt so nice on my chest. I wanted this time to last forever but I knew soon it would be over.
In ten minutes it was over. We had heard her family leave the dining room a little while ago. We put our panties back on and climbed out from under the table on the same side. The dining room stood empty. Jessica smiled at me. She gave me a hug and a big kiss for the first time without fear of being caught.
"That was excellent," she told me.
"I know it was," I told her.
"We have to do that again sometime," she said to me.
"Alright," I told her.
She took her notebook and went to her room then. Although we had said we would do that again that was the first and last time it happened. Just having sex under the table during lunch though, not sex altogether. I had sex with her many times after that day.
 
Lit will not post a sex at 14 story, so the ages need to be corrected.

like most stories posted directly in the thread, this one lacks polish, but it demonstrates talent. I suggest modest editing, especially to format it in paragraphs, etc, then submit.

An example of lines needing editing:

We both had skirts on that day so I agreed to go under the table with her

these two ideas seem smushed together. The 'so" makes sense on reflection, since if they had pants on, oral sex would be tougher. But it slows the reader and distracts them.

They were only an A cup but they still felt good

are you ( or your gf) assuming all readers are big breast fans? the 'but' seems critical of modest breasts.

these are just random examoples.

I did not check word count. Is it 750? If not, rather than padding, how about adding a para where the narrator reflects on how awkward sex efferts with John are?
 
Well, I think the poster was right. It's not a good story.

Just look at that sentence structure: "She was this. She did that. She wanted this. She didn't want that." Boring. Discription? Poor. Sensuality? Flat. I especially like the way she "licked her dry" but "likes her wet." Has anyone ever licked a girl "dry"?

"I wanted this time to last forever but I knew soon it would be over."

That's writing?


---dr.M.
 
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