My BDSM Story

[Toa_lin]

It's up! It's up! It's up! here's teh link, http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=290166

tell me what you guys think.

 

[MasterPhoenix]

will give it a read, bro

 

[Chicklet]

I opened the story and read a little bit of it, but honestly it's really hard for me to focus on stories written like cybersex: "you do this, you do that" etc etc...

 

[Toa_lin]

I opened the story and read a little bit of it, but honestly it's really hard for me to focus on stories written like cybersex: "you do this, you do that" etc etc...

yeah, I understand Chicklet. A little explanation is in order that I didn't do too well at the top of the story. My sub and I are currently stuck in an LDR, so she had asked me to write her a story explaining all the things I plan to do to her when we get together again, then we decided to post it here, so yeah, WARNING: cyber-sex style of writing.

 

[Chicklet]

yeah, I understand Chicklet. A little explanation is in order that I didn't do too well at the top of the story. My sub and I are currently stuck in an LDR, so she had asked me to write her a story explaining all the things I plan to do to her when we get together again, then we decided to post it here, so yeah, WARNING: cyber-sex style of writing.

I think that that's really sweet. And pleasing yourself and your partner should be more important than pleasing your readers.

 

[Toa_lin]

hehehe, which is why i said at the top, I really don't care if it gets completely flamed. we both enjoyed it, and that's all that really matters to me. Though I must thank you for saying you think it's sweet.

 

[leeroy jenkins]

I like the premise and style Toa_lin. Now if you could have intergrated each of the email more fluidly into the story. Reminds me of watching Pulp Fiction. There are espisodes but they all interconnect with each other. I assume its your first story so I will say good job.

 

[Toa_lin]

I like the premise and style Toa_lin. Now if you could have intergrated each of the email more fluidly into the story. Reminds me of watching Pulp Fiction. There are espisodes but they all interconnect with each other. I assume its your first story so I will say good job.

Yeah, i knew the integration problems and everything. I jsut didn't have time to fix em. ((job's a hell-hole right now)) not my first story I've writen, jsut the first I've psoted lol

 

[myinnerslut]

i like it.. i am also "stuck in LDR", and i understand what its like to want someone and know you ont see them for a long time... good story

 

[Toa_lin]

i like it.. i am also "stuck in LDR", and i understand what its like to want someone and know you ont see them for a long time... good story

yeah, best of luck to you, and thank you.

 

[myinnerslut]

and to you... do you ever frequent the distance domination support thread in BDSM talk?