Modern College Ch. 02

[Guest]

Ok Lit Gods, sharpen up your knives and tell me what you think of this latest attempt.


http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=82616

Thanks, Jmt




“A dirty mind is a terrible thing to waste!”

 

[dr_mabeuse]

This is a pretty straightforward sexual fantasy written in first person by a supposed college girl who's hired to be in a porn movie. The filming takes place in a hotel room and she's required to do the usual grocery list of sexual activities, which she enjoys.

Apparently the 'movie' is merely a device to have her engage in a lot of sex in a short time, because the erotic aspects of being filmed are not really developed. She'd might as well be doing this for her own fun in a gang bang.

There's nothing bad about the story, but nothing particularly good about it either. There's very little erotic detail or imagery, just a description of what's done and the way she feels about it, which is usually "good", and the usual come spraying all over.

More detail and description would have made it better, I think.

---dr.M.

 

[Guest]

Thanks for your review

dr_mabeuse,

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my story. I will try to work on including more "detail and description" in the future.

Jmt