me and dad

Slightly off-topic (sort of...)

sirhugs said:
well, in keeping with this thread, at least one of the gals ought to " do" Dad...maybe he watches them with Rick then takes them? The way you've set him up as the man of mystery is such a potent archetype of alpha male. so he needs to exert his dominance.

the sisterly potential also screams to be explored. I expected that from page one

Okay, both good points... now tell me, how does this sound, as a preliminary concept for Ch. 03?:

Kimberley and Keith have a big fight which the rest of the group all hear from their respective cabins, but do not intervene in. She goes to Ashley for comfort and support, but Ash is angry and suspicious of her because she and Rick have become closer since their sensuous coupling.

Kim is hurt, so goes to her youngest sister Connie, who gives her the support she needs, and before long they're hugging each other tightly in Connie's cabin. Over a short period, Connie at least gets turned on by the intimacy, and soon enough starts to get Kim wet as well.

They are kissing and caressing inside of ten minutes after that... then from there, its all over! :)

Around the same time (btw ch.03 would probably end up spanning the entire second day of the caribbean holiday), Rick and Ashley are having their own dramas.

Rick, deciding that he wouldn't be able to hold up any pretences for the entire week-long holiday, comes out with his knowledge about his girlfriend's affair with Keith to her, and Ashley flips out. Another loud argument ensues, but after much hard words and insults from both parties, things settle down and they leave things as they were for a while... stewing on their own personal rages.

He goes to see Andrew, but instead finds Billie in their bunkroom crying quietly, alone - she tells him when he asks that her husband has gone for a long swim to cool down, and that she was crying because they had gotten into quite a heated fight after she had mistakenly uncovered some information from his personal doctor on his terminal illness (I know, a recurring theme! :D)

So now, Rick is not alone in knowing Andrew's dreadful secret... she is hurt and afraid, but understands that she has to get through this and try and bring her fragmenting family together. Again, another comforting moment, with Rick as the 'rock of support' that Billie seemed to need at this point in her life.

Quickly, though, this wholely innocent moment begins to take on an entirely different aspect, as Rick cannot help but begin to get hard, with such a sexy woman's body pressing up against him the way that it was...

Andrew spies them through one of the side viewports when he's coming round on the deck after his swim... he does not confront them, though. He is too shocked, and hurt.

(Keeping to the thread - sort of :)),As he's heading away from the scene of his wife's infidelity with his middle child's boyfriend, Andrew stops short suddenly when Connie (fresh from her lesbian encounter with her sister Kimberley, though he doesn't know this of course!) comes out on the deck, in her teeny-tiny binkini outfit. She leans over to pick something up off the deck, with her ass pointing back towards her Dad. He cannot help but gawk at it, so firm and luminous, barely concealed with the flimsiest of bikini briefs... he gets rock-hard in an instant! (who wouldn't? :p)

Not a bad set-up so far, huh?

From there, well, you know... :devil:

What do you think so far? Okay? Drivel? Thoughts and comments appreciated, ideas moreso! :p
 
Dad, thinking he's going to die anyway soon enough and enraged by his wife's betrayal, decides that maybe his innermost fantasies could, just maybe, become reality in this sinfully delicious cruise story...

Watch out for Ch. 04! :D

Damnit! Now I'm hooked on THIS idea as well! OMG insanity! :p
 
despite the sad ending, as long as Dad gets lots of sex...

and the funereal orgy should be good to celebrate life.
 
sirhugs said:
despite the sad ending, as long as Dad gets lots of sex...

and the funereal orgy should be good to celebrate life.

True, true.... I'm seeing a lot of tears at the funeral and back at the familiy home afterwards, but also a lot of smile ans loving as well :). This will probably be the climactic finish of the series, or the epilogue, if you will...

But yes, there sort of has to be a sad ending for Andrew, because I wrote it into the story already that he had an 'inoperatible' tumor of the brain. BTW please read my other work... maybe PM me with your thoughts on them? I don't get much 'contructive' feedback from fellow authors as often as I would have liked.

Did you SirHugs (and anyone else who may venture across these posts :)) like what Ch. 03/04 might hold? Good work? Suggestions for something new/different? :p
 
Sorry, thought I had said I liked the outline. Just need to work Ashley back into the sex mix somewhere along the way....
 
sirhugs said:
Sorry, thought I had said I liked the outline. Just need to work Ashley back into the sex mix somewhere along the way....

True.. she was meant to be the 'cheating spouse' of the story, to a certain extent. Was thinkin of circumstances forcing her more and more into the arms of her lover Keith...

That is, until their lust and other events force them all into the arms of one another :devil:.
 
TheCaptain said:
True.. she was meant to be the 'cheating spouse' of the story, to a certain extent. Was thinkin of circumstances forcing her more and more into the arms of her lover Keith...

That is, until their lust and other events force them all into the arms of one another :devil:.

I never really cared for Keith. I would rather she comfort dad.
 
sirhugs said:
I never really cared for Keith. I would rather she comfort dad.

lol that was the point of Keith's creation :D

Guess I could direct her more towards Dad... but she is in a 'relationship' (thou both parties cheating) with Keith of course :)

Maybe have them both fight as well as her already havin rough times with Rick... this drives her more towards Dad.... she learns (somehow - unspecified) that he is dying and feelings of love and passion swell unbidden up to the surface

BTW how bout this for the 'perfect' ending?- Keith dies in 'accident' (thou Rick is suspected because he's 'murderously' enraged at him for sleepin with his gf hehe) and docs are able to cut out a tiny piece of his brain and, thru the wonders of science (I know, this is getting WAY out there - pretty much impossible) they're able to save Andrew's life. BTW this will most likely NOT be the way the story plays out! :p
 
I thought Dad spies Rick with Billie...he goes off to pout. Ashley finds him, offers comfort. Simple? Too simple?
 
sirhugs said:
I thought Dad spies Rick with Billie...he goes off to pout. Ashley finds him, offers comfort. Simple? Too simple?

Simple is good... but then so is complex! :p

But nah, that's good I like. Don't know if it would be better to have him chasing her or her chasing him... thoughts either way?

And I don't want Andrew leaping straight into sex with his kids... he's ex-SEAL type and wouldn't be into that sort of thing right off the bat, but it does grow on him (pun intended :D)

He ends up having sex with all his daughters thou, just don't know the order yet... was thinkin that after seein Rick with Billie he spots Connie strutting around out on deck, gets aroused, and thinks of what it could be like with her.

From daytime fantasies, it eventuates into something more... :p

Good way to carry things on, or maybe work Ash in first as suggested?

BTW you know that you'll have to be HEAVILY accredited to both this work AND any Ben/Jen/Angelina works I write you know, SirHugs! :)
 
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