New writer - need help developing a plot

[DavisFrost]

I’m a new writer on Literotica. I am working on a ‘Interracial Love’ story. I need a little help from Literotica writers to build the plot. I have developed the starting part. My description is a bit long, but it will help you understand the characters and the setting. Here it is:

Kate and Amy, two friends, went on vacation to one of the Caribbean islands, like Jamaica, Haiti, or Barbados. They are both married. Kate is outgoing and likes to take risks, but Amy is more timid and shy. Kate came up with the idea for the trip to Jamaica, and Amy is going along with it. Kate was ready for more than just sightseeing. They stayed at a hotel that looked out over the ocean. The day they got there, they went to the beach to swim and soak up the sun. Kate came back from the beach, and Amy said she would be there in a few minutes. Kate was in the hotel's common shower room near the entrance. This is where people wash off the sand after coming from the beach. A young man from the area named Jason was cleaning the bathroom floor. Kate came out of the shower wearing a towel. Kate dropped the towel because there was no one else in the shower room. She wanted to tease him a little. Jason, cocky enough, decided to tease back. He picked up the towel and held it out of her reach. Kate stood in front of him, naked and helpless, because of her own doing. Then ‘accidentally’ Jason brushed his fingers against her hip, lingering just a second too long. She gasped, and before she could react, with a bold move, he pulled her close by the waist, kissed her before she could stop. As the kiss continued, Kate naked in his arms, that’s when Amy came into the shower room and Kate detached. Seeing Kate’s willful participation, Amy said sorry to come at an awkward time. Kate acted playfully, took the towel from Jason and wrapped it around her slowly. She said “see you next time” to Jason and headed toward her room. Amy shrugged and entered into the shower.

Later that evening, Kate stood at the line to buy ice cream from the hotel’s ice cream bar for her and Amy. Jason’s shift was just over and he went to Kate. He wanted to get what was promised for ‘next time’. Kate didn’t know how to react, she didn’t want to do anything in front of everyone around, but Jason kept pleading. She told him to wait in her room with Amy. She thought she and Amy would explain and tell him to leave her alone. Jason and Amy were talking while Amy watched TV in their room. While they were talking, Jason casually pulled out his cock and started to jerk off. Amy was surprised by what he did and thought about telling him to leave the room. He was, however, Kate's guest. Amy didn't know what Kate wanted from him, and because she was timid, she couldn't be harsh. Jason kept talking to her, and Amy kept stealing glances at his organ while they talked. Jason gradually talked her into touching his cock, later stroking it, leading her to suck his cock. Jason eventually led her where he wanted. Kate entered the room and was surprised to see, Amy is sucking his cock. On her way to the room, Kate was thinking about how to drive this enthusiastic man away. But watching Amy serving him, Kate felt competitive about Amy’s progress instead. Amy separated herself much like how Kate did in the shower room. Kate, regaining her adventurous spirit, assisted Amy to resume her mouth-play and she also joined the party.

From then, these three people began engaging in sexual activities frequently. Jason became their tour guide, and they had affairs at each exotic location they visited. Amy, true to her nature, became Jason’s submissive. Jason, while unconsciously, preferred Amy over Kate. Kate felt a twinge of jealousy for being the second woman. Jason, being cocky, eventually involved his local buddies in their ventures. Amy, encouraged by Jason and Kate, was always pushing herself to new limits. At the end, Jason took these two females to a yacht owned by his rich friend, where they had orgies.

1) Would it be better if the women brought their husbands along on this trip? In that case, they have to keep their private affairs a secret from their husbands. That can also make the story more thrilling. I don’t want the husbands to be involved in the affairs. I want to keep the story a ladies’ adventure, especially Amy’s exploration for her sexuality, even if it means being someone's submissive.

2) Will Amy start to expect more from Jason emotionally? Will Kate do something to get back her title as the 'alpha woman'? Will the competition turn out to be ugly?

3) What should happen at the end of the story? Will there be a climax in the story, or will the two ladies just go back to their home country after a great vacation? Anything special happened in the yacht apart from the orgy? Or, the husbands went to Jamaica later and found out how great the wives were having their vacation? Will it make them feel betrayed and angry, leading to an emotional crisis?​

 

[AlinaX]

The middle part doesn’t really make sense to me. Jason at the bar pressuring the women? Why? Why is he there? Why would the hotel allow it?

Plus, who are these women? It’s not enough that they’re alone (or not) and that one is bold, one is shy.

The room has a double bed. Amy had been looking forward to this holiday with her husband. It was their fifth anniversary, after all. She understood his job was unpredictable in this way, but still. Fortunately, Kate had been able to take his place, so the holiday wasn’t wasted.

Kate had jumped at the chance to get away. Her marriage wasn’t going well. Apart from anything else, the sex was infrequent and unimaginative, and in truth had never quite been what she needed. Teasing Jason in the shower was a daring bit of fun; she kept herself in shape, after all, and it was good to have a man react to that.

Amy, knowing her friend’s unhappiness at home and seeing her excitement now, starts a game of What If. “What if you went further?” What’s a little infidelity on holiday, after all, especially when the marriage clearly won’t last. Kate is happy to play the game, replying, “What if you were to join in? We’ve only got the one bed, after all…”

 

[LoneMilf]

1) Would it be better if the women brought their husbands along on this trip? In that case, they have to keep their private affairs a secret from their husbands. That can also make the story more thrilling. I don’t want the husbands to be involved in the affairs. I want to keep the story a ladies’ adventure, especially Amy’s exploration for her sexuality, even if it means being someone's submissive.

Better for whom? If the husbands are there, the cheating becomes more the focus of the story. That will be a thrill for some and a turn-off for others. It's your story, you get to choose

3) What should happen at the end of the story? Will there be a climax in the story, or will the two ladies just go back to their home country after a great vacation? Anything special happened in the yacht apart from the orgy? Or, the husbands went to Jamaica later and found out how great the wives were having their vacation? Will it make them feel betrayed and angry, leading to an emotional crisis?

Again, it depends on what you want the story to be about. However, you might want to keep it simple. It's easier to write a good story if you focus and don't try to include every outcome or kink you might eventually want to write about.

Based on what you've said, I would recommend keeping the focus on the women and their adventures. And if you do that, it makes sense to let the story end with them going home, maybe wondering what their 'real' lives will be like now.
You can always choose to do a follow-up focused on the husbands' reactions if you feel like it later.

 

[Husky_Embrace]

One suggestion is to use the normal spacing. People like seeing the block alignment more than the regular one, but the regular one is much easier to actually read. There is higher speed and comprehension, as less cognitive load is required for the awkward spacing between the words. It changes per line, making it really bad for reading.

I feel there's supposed to be a theme, but it is still lacking. Part of it seems to be that Amy overcomes part of her shyness in this situation. However, people aren't timid because they like it. Being submissive isn't the default for a shy person. With roleplay people are generally going to the other side, as that is a new and exciting experience. Especially with things like BDSM you see that in most cases the submissive person is still in control. Amy can be submissive, but consider to give her a chance or two to act out the dominant role. She can be timid in that, carefully exploring how far she can go. Katie and Jason can guide her by role-playing themselves.

Back to the theme.
- Is breaking a timid narure the only goal? If it is, how will the story reflect that if she is otherwise submissive?
- They are married. How is this significant to the women? At the moment it seems to make no difference. We can leave it out for the same story. If you want to do something with it, maybe have the husband interact with them. Like calling during a sexual escapade. Would the women pick up? What if they (video)call after and one or more is in the shower? Or a condom wrapper is on the bed?
- Are there further (hidden) themes to unpack?
- What is the red thread of the storyline we're supposed to follow?

On your nr 2 about emotional investment, it depends more on the characters. I assume neither has an emotional investment, unless. Why would they? They are married, and being timid has nothing to do with requesting emotional investment. Why wouldn't Jason want emotional investment for that matter? Maybe he falls in love head over heels for one of them.

The same counts for nr 3. The characters their personality are more of an influence. Mostly I expect them not to be emotionally invested in Jason, nor Jason in them. The emotions are around their marriage and their promiscuity. It can be a great hook for the story to break that expectation, with Jason becoming much more emotionally attached for example. Stories stay in our memory because parts of it aren't what we expect.

 

[Rob_Royale]

You'll forgive me, but I skipped the description and jumped right to the three numbered questions.
And forgive me for being brusque, but all of them need to be answered by you by knowing what you want to accomplish in the story.

Do you want intrique and tension or just women getting laid? That answers #1.

Decide who your characters are. Are they loving or forgiving or vindictive and controlling? That answers #2.

The answers to #1 and #2, will answer #3.
The ending is about your characters getting what they want/need from the adventure. Or what they deserve.

Lastly, from my days in the Coast Guard I can tell you that there are lots of wonderful islands in the Caribbean, and all would be perfect for an interracial story, but Haiti is not one of them. Not a tourist destination at all.

I'd recommend Barbados, Aruba, Trinidad, Grand Caiman and the British Virgin Islands.

 

[KittyOfSteele]

Lastly, from my days in the Coast Guard I can tell you that there are lots of wonderful islands in the Caribbean, and all would be perfect for an interracial story, but Haiti is not one of them. Not a tourist destination at all.

I'd recommend Barbados, Aruba, Trinidad, Grand Caiman and the British Virgin Islands.

I was going to say the same. Going to Haiti now is like going to Nassau between the late 1600s and early 1700s. According to some tourists Barbados can be boring; some believe it's overrated.

Of course, the Caribbean is more than just islands. You have a very long coastline across it that pretty much goes from Florida all the way down to French Guiana. There are lots of countries and beaches all over there, and islands too.

 

[Angela_Draws]

I’m a new writer on Literotica. I am working on a ‘Interracial Love’ story. I need a little help from Literotica writers to build the plot. I have developed the starting part. My description is a bit long, but it will help you understand the characters and the setting. Here it is:

Kate and Amy, two friends, went on vacation to one of the Caribbean islands, like Jamaica, Haiti, or Barbados. They are both married. Kate is outgoing and likes to take risks, but Amy is more timid and shy. Kate came up with the idea for the trip to Jamaica, and Amy is going along with it. Kate was ready for more than just sightseeing. They stayed at a hotel that looked out over the ocean. The day they got there, they went to the beach to swim and soak up the sun. Kate came back from the beach, and Amy said she would be there in a few minutes. Kate was in the hotel's common shower room near the entrance. This is where people wash off the sand after coming from the beach. A young man from the area named Jason was cleaning the bathroom floor. Kate came out of the shower wearing a towel. Kate dropped the towel because there was no one else in the shower room. She wanted to tease him a little. Jason, cocky enough, decided to tease back. He picked up the towel and held it out of her reach. Kate stood in front of him, naked and helpless, because of her own doing. Then ‘accidentally’ Jason brushed his fingers against her hip, lingering just a second too long. She gasped, and before she could react, with a bold move, he pulled her close by the waist, kissed her before she could stop. As the kiss continued, Kate naked in his arms, that’s when Amy came into the shower room and Kate detached. Seeing Kate’s willful participation, Amy said sorry to come at an awkward time. Kate acted playfully, took the towel from Jason and wrapped it around her slowly. She said “see you next time” to Jason and headed toward her room. Amy shrugged and entered into the shower.

Later that evening, Kate stood at the line to buy ice cream from the hotel’s ice cream bar for her and Amy. Jason’s shift was just over and he went to Kate. He wanted to get what was promised for ‘next time’. Kate didn’t know how to react, she didn’t want to do anything in front of everyone around, but Jason kept pleading. She told him to wait in her room with Amy. She thought she and Amy would explain and tell him to leave her alone. Jason and Amy were talking while Amy watched TV in their room. While they were talking, Jason casually pulled out his cock and started to jerk off. Amy was surprised by what he did and thought about telling him to leave the room. He was, however, Kate's guest. Amy didn't know what Kate wanted from him, and because she was timid, she couldn't be harsh. Jason kept talking to her, and Amy kept stealing glances at his organ while they talked. Jason gradually talked her into touching his cock, later stroking it, leading her to suck his cock. Jason eventually led her where he wanted. Kate entered the room and was surprised to see, Amy is sucking his cock. On her way to the room, Kate was thinking about how to drive this enthusiastic man away. But watching Amy serving him, Kate felt competitive about Amy’s progress instead. Amy separated herself much like how Kate did in the shower room. Kate, regaining her adventurous spirit, assisted Amy to resume her mouth-play and she also joined the party.

From then, these three people began engaging in sexual activities frequently. Jason became their tour guide, and they had affairs at each exotic location they visited. Amy, true to her nature, became Jason’s submissive. Jason, while unconsciously, preferred Amy over Kate. Kate felt a twinge of jealousy for being the second woman. Jason, being cocky, eventually involved his local buddies in their ventures. Amy, encouraged by Jason and Kate, was always pushing herself to new limits. At the end, Jason took these two females to a yacht owned by his rich friend, where they had orgies.

1) Would it be better if the women brought their husbands along on this trip? In that case, they have to keep their private affairs a secret from their husbands. That can also make the story more thrilling. I don’t want the husbands to be involved in the affairs. I want to keep the story a ladies’ adventure, especially Amy’s exploration for her sexuality, even if it means being someone's submissive.

2) Will Amy start to expect more from Jason emotionally? Will Kate do something to get back her title as the 'alpha woman'? Will the competition turn out to be ugly?

3) What should happen at the end of the story? Will there be a climax in the story, or will the two ladies just go back to their home country after a great vacation? Anything special happened in the yacht apart from the orgy? Or, the husbands went to Jamaica later and found out how great the wives were having their vacation? Will it make them feel betrayed and angry, leading to an emotional crisis?​

To make your writing more engaging try incorporating a bit of suspense instead of revealing everything directly drop small hints and clues that encourage the reader to keep turning the pages A little suspense and unexpected twists can make your story more interestingg memorable, and impactfull keeping the reader curious and invested...........

 

[Andreas_Kreuz]

To me, the what (sex) is not as important as the why and how.

I would not bring the husbands. If it is a first story, I would keep it simple.

You have more than enough material to work with. A triangle. Horny people. The submission of Amy must be written. Kate's reaction.

Yes, I think, you should have a closure. Does not have to be dramatic. Just make the last intercourse before the flight back somehow special. Maybe Smy only then fully submits, or make it their first proper threesome.

 

[DavisFrost]

The middle part doesn’t really make sense to me. Jason at the bar pressuring the women? Why? Why is he there? Why would the hotel allow it?

Plus, who are these women? It’s not enough that they’re alone (or not) and that one is bold, one is shy.

The room has a double bed. Amy had been looking forward to this holiday with her husband. It was their fifth anniversary, after all. She understood his job was unpredictable in this way, but still. Fortunately, Kate had been able to take his place, so the holiday wasn’t wasted.

Kate had jumped at the chance to get away. Her marriage wasn’t going well. Apart from anything else, the sex was infrequent and unimaginative, and in truth had never quite been what she needed. Teasing Jason in the shower was a daring bit of fun; she kept herself in shape, after all, and it was good to have a man react to that.

Amy, knowing her friend’s unhappiness at home and seeing her excitement now, starts a game of What If. “What if you went further?” What’s a little infidelity on holiday, after all, especially when the marriage clearly won’t last. Kate is happy to play the game, replying, “What if you were to join in? We’ve only got the one bed, after all…”

Thank you for the amazing idea!

Kate’s restless energy and Amy’s curiosity make their dynamic more interesting. The 'What If' game is such a clever device to escalate things naturally. I’ll definitely weave this into their motivations and observe where it leads me to.

 

[DavisFrost]

One suggestion is to use the normal spacing. People like seeing the block alignment more than the regular one, but the regular one is much easier to actually read. There is higher speed and comprehension, as less cognitive load is required for the awkward spacing between the words. It changes per line, making it really bad for reading.

Thank you for the spacing note. It’s a subtle but impactful point, and I’ll adjust the formatting accordingly.

I feel there's supposed to be a theme, but it is still lacking. Part of it seems to be that Amy overcomes part of her shyness in this situation. However, people aren't timid because they like it. Being submissive isn't the default for a shy person. With roleplay people are generally going to the other side, as that is a new and exciting experience. Especially with things like BDSM you see that in most cases the submissive person is still in control. Amy can be submissive, but consider to give her a chance or two to act out the dominant role. She can be timid in that, carefully exploring how far she can go. Katie and Jason can guide her by role-playing themselves.

The theme of the story is how a shy person can transcend barriers when given some encouragement and an unjudgmental environment (i.e., no familiar prying eyes). Here Amy is submissive but the story will not be extended till the BDSM limit. She will just follow Jason and Kate's lead. Amy will engage with Jason (in Kate's presence) in her hotel bed, maybe she will give him blowjobs in the secluded parts of the sea beach and have an orgy in the yacht, which she never knew was possible by her. But you are right, even being compliant, she can still be in control.

Back to the theme.
- Is breaking a timid narure the only goal? If it is, how will the story reflect that if she is otherwise submissive?
- They are married. How is this significant to the women? At the moment it seems to make no difference. We can leave it out for the same story. If you want to do something with it, maybe have the husband interact with them. Like calling during a sexual escapade. Would the women pick up? What if they (video)call after and one or more is in the shower? Or a condom wrapper is on the bed?
- Are there further (hidden) themes to unpack?
- What is the red thread of the storyline we're supposed to follow?

I will definitely think about finding answers to those questions while writing. Thanks for listing them out for me. This is like something, what I was expecting while posting in this forum for help.

Thank you for your detailed reply. It means a lot.

 

[DavisFrost]

Do you want intrique and tension or just women getting laid? That answers #1.

Decide who your characters are. Are they loving or forgiving or vindictive and controlling? That answers #2.

The answers to #1 and #2, will answer #3.
The ending is about your characters getting what they want/need from the adventure. Or what they deserve.

Appreciate the clarity! You’ve given me exactly the framework I needed for those 3 questions.

Lastly, from my days in the Coast Guard I can tell you that there are lots of wonderful islands in the Caribbean, and all would be perfect for an interracial story, but Haiti is not one of them. Not a tourist destination at all.

I'd recommend Barbados, Aruba, Trinidad, Grand Caiman and the British Virgin Islands.

Thanks again for listing out the names where the story can take place.

 

[DavisFrost]

To me, the what (sex) is not as important as the why and how.

I would not bring the husbands. If it is a first story, I would keep it simple.

You have more than enough material to work with. A triangle. Horny people. The submission of Amy must be written. Kate's reaction.

Yes, I think, you should have a closure. Does not have to be dramatic. Just make the last intercourse before the flight back somehow special. Maybe Amy only then fully submits, or make it their first proper threesome.

Thanks a lot !
You have not only given inspiration, but also rendered me some ideas about the closure.

 

[AlinaX]

Thank you for the amazing idea!

Kate’s restless energy and Amy’s curiosity make their dynamic more interesting. The 'What If' game is such a clever device to escalate things naturally. I’ll definitely weave this into their motivations and observe where it leads me to.

Amy laughed, but instinctively shied away from the idea of betraying her husband this way.

He was always so busy, though! When was the last time he had indulged her kinkier side? “What if you tied me to the bed,” she dared to reply, “so that I had no choice but to watch the two of you?”

Kate’s startled reaction, the deep, speculative curiosity, told Amy she’d dared too much. “You’d like that, would you?”

 

[Rob_Royale]

Appreciate the clarity! You’ve given me exactly the framework I needed for those 3 questions.
Thanks again for listing out the names where the story can take place.

Thank you for taking criticism so well. That can be a rare thing around here. Please post up a link to your story when it gets published. I'd be happy to read it. Also, I'd like to correct my spelling of one of the islands. Grand Cayman.