Loving wife idea I think

[loquere]

A sucessful husband (30 something) neglects his hot wife(29 yearold)
Refusing to even giver her the simplest compliment.

They are heading to a corporate party where, he insults her. She goes off to sulk when an eighteen yearold guy with braces dragged there by his parents gives her a genuine compliment based on the exact thing her husband put her down on.

-She ends up fucking the eighteen yearold.
-She is shocked later to find out until her the 18 yearold was gay.

 

[lovecraft68]

Basic, but good, LW concept.

Except where you get to where he is gay (well Bi obviously) that won't go over well there, is there a reason he needs to be Bi?

 

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[loquere]

Loving wife/first time idea

A sucessful husband (30 something) neglects his hot wife(29 yearold)
Refusing to even giver her the simplest compliment.

They are heading to a corporate party where, he insults her. She goes off to sulk when an eighteen yearold guy with braces dragged there by his parents gives her a genuine compliment based on the exact thing her husband put her down on.

-She ends up fucking the eighteen yearold.
-She is shocked later to find out until her the 18 yearold was gay.

 

[DarkPleasures]

A sucessful husband (30 something) neglects his hot wife(29 yearold)
Refusing to even giver her the simplest compliment.

They are heading to a corporate party where, he insults her. She goes off to sulk when an eighteen yearold guy with braces dragged there by his parents gives her a genuine compliment based on the exact thing her husband put her down on.

-She ends up fucking the eighteen yearold.
-She is shocked later to find out until her the 18 yearold was gay.

Why write the SAME "story idea" at 9:00 am CST and at 9:23 am CST? Link to second thread of 100% same content.

Other thread's first post quoted in case you pull a Beck and wish to delete.

Loving wife/first time idea
A sucessful husband (30 something) neglects his hot wife(29 yearold)
Refusing to even giver her the simplest compliment.

They are heading to a corporate party where, he insults her. She goes off to sulk when an eighteen yearold guy with braces dragged there by his parents gives her a genuine compliment based on the exact thing her husband put her down on.

-She ends up fucking the eighteen yearold.
-She is shocked later to find out until her the 18 yearold was gay.

 

[Sean Renaud]

It actually sounds like a quick fun story. Though I'm also confused as to why the boy being gay/bi is at all important to the story. Maybe if this was supposed to be part of a larger universe it would be interesting but unless we were supposed to know who this boy was that's a bit unnecessary.

I'd probably make the couple at least ten year older than they are in the story. Sure you can neglect a 29 year old but she's still rather young. I think the story would benefit from her being at least old enough (assuming that she's supposed to be Lit standard still hot) that she can't just pop in a bikini and spend a day poolside when her ego needs stroking.

 

[loquere]

It actually sounds like a quick fun story. Though I'm also confused as to why the boy being gay/bi is at all important to the story. Maybe if this was supposed to be part of a larger universe it would be interesting but unless we were supposed to know who this boy was that's a bit unnecessary.

I'd probably make the couple at least ten year older than they are in the story. Sure you can neglect a 29 year old but she's still rather young. I think the story would benefit from her being at least old enough (assuming that she's supposed to be Lit standard still hot) that she can't just pop in a bikini and spend a day poolside when her ego needs stroking.

The gay thing was supposed to make her feel extra special and be like this bonds that says I'm the only girl for him. Ive removed the gay part. I'm not budging on the age, the kid needs to be high-school age, the braces gave me the whole dea. The braces are key for my imagery and this is all about what gets me off her being 29 and her husband 32-33 works fine. I know I said I was done writing but I actually wrote this in the middle of the night on my iPad last night, as we drove back from the, live free or die state.

 

[sirhugs]

do they fuck, or just oral?

 

[loquere]

do they fuck, or just oral?

They fuck

 

[Sean Renaud]

Why do you keep posting the same story idea with no tweaks?

 

[wheelchair27]

How about this in addition to the braces he has some other thing or things that make him unattractive to young women his own age.

 

[MyRubiLips]

Why do you keep posting the same story idea with no tweaks?

I fixed that. The two are now one.

 

[loquere]

Why do you keep posting the same story idea with no tweaks?

I posted it the Second time because a FUCKER ON IGNORE POSTED WHERE HE IS NOT WANTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[MyRubiLips]

Putting someone on ignore means you cannot see their post. Case closed. End of story. Had you not written "This message is hidden because lovecraft68 is on your ignore list." in six different posts, you may have had more replies to your story idea. As it is, his reply was not negative.

Starting the two threads of the same content seemed to send off "flags" with some of the other members. I'm here because of reported posts.

 

[loquere]

Putting someone on ignore means you cannot see their post. Case closed. End of story. Had you not written "This message is hidden because lovecraft68 is on your ignore list." in six different posts, you may have had more replies to your story idea. As it is, his reply was not negative.

Starting the two threads of the same content seemed to send off "flags" with some of the other members. I'm here because of reported posts.

I truly dont care what he had to say. He could drop dead tmrw and I wouldn't give a fuk. If I could have deleted and started over again I would.

 

[MyRubiLips]

Wow. Just remember, you cannot control Lit. Start your own site and you can ban and control all you want! I certainly can delete this thread for you, if that is what you wish, but I will not do it "each time" certain people post in a thread you start.

 

[loquere]

Wow. Just remember, you cannot control Lit. Start your own site and you can ban and control all you want! I certainly can delete this thread for you, if that is what you wish, but I will not do it "each time" certain people post in a thread you start.

Thank you for your clarity and advice.

 

[Tmmldr]

The gay thing was supposed to make her feel extra special and be like this bonds that says I'm the only girl for him. Ive removed the gay part. I'm not budging on the age, the kid needs to be high-school age, the braces gave me the whole dea. The braces are key for my imagery and this is all about what gets me off her being 29 and her husband 32-33 works fine. I know I said I was done writing but I actually wrote this in the middle of the night on my iPad last night, as we drove back from the, live free or die state.

Here's a twist.

The supposedly gay kid was raised by some parents who were some sick fucks, and they trained him to be gay - made him wear dresses, play with girls toys.

Then by chance he is assaulted by a real woman.

 

[VladHarkonnen]

The gay thing was supposed to make her feel extra special and be like this bonds that says I'm the only girl for him. Ive removed the gay part. I'm not budging on the age, the kid needs to be high-school age, the braces gave me the whole dea. The braces are key for my imagery and this is all about what gets me off her being 29 and her husband 32-33 works fine. I know I said I was done writing but I actually wrote this in the middle of the night on my iPad last night, as we drove back from the, live free or die state.

The wife's youth and appearance make it sound like the kid with braces is getting a mercy fuck but i get that it's what turns you on. Maybe this woman, while being very attractive, has a self esteem issue. I mean, why else would a relatively young and attractive woman put up with a husband that insults her.

Would this kid with braces be well hung or have some kind of something or other that the asshole husband doesn't? (other than appreciation I mean)

 

[loquere]

The wife's youth and appearance make it sound like the kid with braces is getting a mercy fuck but i get that it's what turns you on. Maybe this woman, while being very attractive, has a self esteem issue. I mean, why else would a relatively young and attractive woman put up with a husband that insults her.

Would this kid with braces be well hung or have some kind of something or other that the asshole husband doesn't? (other than appreciation I mean)

-No lol to the well hung, recalling what I wrote, I use wording like lengthy girth. However I don't use sizes for anything penis height nothing. I use descriptors. The kid has stamina lol, but he's normal.

-The husband doesn't as much insult her as much as he unknowingly neglects her stupidly. I'll tell you what I'll finish editing on my you take a read and tell me what you think.