Jmanchu
El Capitan
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So, I'm looking for possible beta-readers (may also be down for editing... maybe), for a rework of the first part of my ongoing series (A Ballad of Light and Darkness). It's mythic fantasy in theme, Dunsanian, Tolkien-esque, Dark fantasy, a bit of 'chosen hero' trope, etc.
It has dark elves. FMC is a dark elf princess.
I've redone the prose almost completely: uptdated to be a little emotive in focus, a little archaic in diction (only a little), more "Dunsanian"... if you will... Particularly with the new Chapter 1, after the prologue. It's also a little bit maximalist, as in a bit ornate and with metaphors.
Chapter 1 starts very atmosphere and mood focused, so heads up. after a years long hiatus. Reworked the story to suit my vision of it much better, compared to the first version of the first part published here. The revision is almost completely different.
Some warnings:
-There are no sex scenes in this first part. There is some sensual dark elf dancing, though.
-There is an SA attempt in the last scene, unsuccessful, but just thought I should add the warning, anyways.
It has dark elves. FMC is a dark elf princess.
I've redone the prose almost completely: uptdated to be a little emotive in focus, a little archaic in diction (only a little), more "Dunsanian"... if you will... Particularly with the new Chapter 1, after the prologue. It's also a little bit maximalist, as in a bit ornate and with metaphors.
Chapter 1 starts very atmosphere and mood focused, so heads up. after a years long hiatus. Reworked the story to suit my vision of it much better, compared to the first version of the first part published here. The revision is almost completely different.
Some warnings:
-There are no sex scenes in this first part. There is some sensual dark elf dancing, though.
-There is an SA attempt in the last scene, unsuccessful, but just thought I should add the warning, anyways.
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