Looking for beta reader for a scene with possible pronoun confusion

[SDNight]

The main character in my story is an unnamed submissive. She is only referred to by pronouns. Her Dom is male, so their scenes together have no chance for pronoun confusion. However, there is a female/female BDSM scene. Though, I believe I've done well to mitigate any possible reader confusion, there are sentences where "she" and "she" refer to two different people. My two beta readers had no problems understanding who was who, but I would like to get a few more eyeballs on this scene in particular before I submit the story.

If anyone is interested, I would appreciate any feedback. The scene contains domination, impact play, pony play, humiliation, and anal.

 

[Beneaththesurface]

I would take a look. I’m not a professional editor but would give you some feedback. If interested in sending pm me with your email and I’ll reply with address to send it to.

 

[HighLuster]

The main character in my story is an unnamed submissive. She is only referred to by pronouns. Her Dom is male, so their scenes together have no chance for pronoun confusion. However, there is a female/female BDSM scene. Though, I believe I've done well to mitigate any possible reader confusion, there are sentences where "she" and "she" refer to two different people. My two beta readers had no problems understanding who was who, but I would like to get a few more eyeballs on this scene in particular before I submit the story.

If anyone is interested, I would appreciate any feedback. The scene contains domination, impact play, pony play, humiliation, and anal.

Successfully differentiating between two different people who are referred to using the same pronoun is a challenge. I'm curious about how you went about doing that will gladly identify any ambiguities that stand out. Message me on my contacts tab and I'll reply with an email.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

If no-one responds I could take a look. Much sympathy for the problem - my recent Valentine's story is two women doing BDSM and a couple times I seriously thought about changing one into a man... I gave them very short names partly so I could use their names more often than usually works in a story!