Long time, first time: feedback request

[Groppius]

Hey there, long time lurker, first time writer. I've been on this forum for a long time, in various forms, and while I've read some stories now and again I primarily spend my time in the personal ads section ('it is what it is' as they say).

For whatever reason (procrastination) I decided to try my hand at writing a story myself.

Empty Gallery Part One

Prose isn't exactly my go-to form and I'm inexperienced at erotica. I'd love to know what you're reading experience is like. Constructive criticism is very much welcome but really I just want to know how this is hitting people- good and bad. Don't be shy. What was reading this story like for you?