Is This Too Much?

[SexyChele]

I'm thinking of a story that involves interracial (black and white) woman/woman and lacation. It will be a very short story - 4 1/2 pages typed. (short for me!) Do you think this is over the top? The woman/woman thing is set. Should it just be interracial? Or just have lacation? Or do you think it's fine as is?

Can you tell I'm a bit confused?

 

[pointless]

i think it sounds great. not a bit over the top. a nice mix of genres never hurt anyone.

 

[eepy]

I think the interracial female/female is enough. It's a unique combination (I should think it is, anyway -- I tend toward male/female stories myself), and you should be able to create plenty of tension and eroticism with that set-up. The lactation element would be a bit much, I think But I'm no expert.

(Love your AV, by the way. Gives me an idea for a pose for a pic )

 

[SuperShyGuy]

I agree this idea has merit. Anything remotely original has to score bonus points, and I can't remember ever reading a lesbian, interracial, lactation story before!

 

[eepy]

Looks like I'm out-voted. Ah well

 

[NASCARaddicted]

I don't see a problem with this interracial stuff, it's cool.

As for the lactation stuff .... What about this: They both love to play with each other, and one of their favorite thing is: tit sucking. They did it many times before the pregnancy ... but this is the first time that they do it, after the lactation started. So, at one time, one of the woman plays with the other womans tits .... and suddenly, some milk comes out.

They giggle about it - but then, they give it another try .... and in the end, one woman is breastfeeding the other one, like a baby ....

 

[Guest]

I would say your idea is not "over the top". Many people have lactation fetishes. (And, not all of them are being an adult drinking breast milk.) So, why can't a white woman have this fetish? Why can't a black woman? Why can't they be attracted to one another? I've been with black women and it's always been a lot of fun!

It's hard to come up with new ideas in literature. Even when we think we have one, we could see "our" idea written elsewhere. Never be afraid to be you and write what you like. If other people like your work, that's an added bonus.

 

[SexyChele]

Gosh, thanks, everyone for the responses! And thanks for the encouragement - I really appreciate it. I've read stories where it seemed writers were trying to throw everything, including the kitchen sink, into the mix and unable to focus on any one aspect of the story. I was just concerned that putting too much in would do the same. But, the plot is basically simple and hopefully should work.

Thanks again, everyone!

 

[Dirt Man]

Dear SexyChele....

That the two women are having a lesbian affair is secondary, that one is black, and the other is white is secondary, that one, or both are lactating is secondary to the root of the story. What titilates one drinks sour from another's cup. But what led them to this point is what the story is all about. If you think otherwise, then you do the story a great disservice.


As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man

 

[pop_54]

Re: Dear SexyChele....

That the two women are having a lesbian affair is secondary, that one is black, and the other is white is secondary, that one, or both are lactating is secondary to the root of the story. What titilates one drinks sour from another's cup. But what led them to this point is what the story is all about. If you think otherwise, then you do the story a great disservice.


As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man

Have to agree here, doesn't matter what colour or creed the girls are, or what they are doing, it's how they are doing it and why that matters.
A good build up and decent history combined with a reasonable sensual act or two and all should be fine.

 

[Chicklet]

people mix genre's all the time - it's the spice of life, baby! GO AHEAD!

 

[Svenskaflicka]

I don't see a problem with this interracial stuff, it's cool.

As for the lactation stuff .... What about this: They both love to play with each other, and one of their favorite thing is: tit sucking. They did it many times before the pregnancy ... but this is the first time that they do it, after the lactation started. So, at one time, one of the woman plays with the other womans tits .... and suddenly, some milk comes out.

They giggle about it - but then, they give it another try .... and in the end, one woman is breastfeeding the other one, like a baby ....

As I read your post, Nascar, I was expecting to see something like "they were halfsisters"...

 

[Dirt Man]

Chicklet, check PM's...

Sent you a message.

As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man

 

[lobito]

novel idea as a play on words... do it

 

[sirhugs]

Gosh, thanks, everyone for the responses! And thanks for the encouragement - I really appreciate it. I've read stories where it seemed writers were trying to throw everything, including the kitchen sink, into the mix and unable to focus on any one aspect of the story. I was just concerned that putting too much in would do the same. But, the plot is basically simple and hopefully should work.

Thanks again, everyone!

somewhere I read that you can mix up to 3 genres without losing focus. You seem to just skate inside that "rule". You may need however to pick one as the central theme.

 

[SexyChele]

Again, thanks all! Story is written. Had to keep it short as I did it as an audio story. I guess I'll see how well received it is once it is posted! And I did find myself really focusing on 2 of the 3 things I stated - the woman/woman and lacation thing. The interracial thing just sort of turned into something that was in the story, but not an overwhelming part of it. Maybe because I personally don't consider interracial sex to be all that big a deal.

Oh well, thanks again, all!