Is this one sentence clear?

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She leaned in, staring me right in the face. I didn't look at her directly, but I could see her jet-black hair and eyebrows and eyeshadow and shirt and lipstick.
Can you tell from that sentence that the speaker means that she has black hair, black eyebrows, black eyeshadow, black shirt ... ?

-Annie
 
Can you tell from that sentence that the speaker means that she has black hair, black eyebrows, black eyeshadow, black shirt ... ?

-Annie
I would assume that’s what you’re saying, but to be brutally honest, that many ‘ands’ really interrupt the flow and personally, I wouldn’t read on. You could rewrite to talk about darkness, matching etc etc
 
Thanks.

Once I noticed the ambiguity, I changed it, but I was wondering if the assembled authors would read it the way I originally meant it. Answer: mostly no.

-Annie
 
I would assume that’s what you’re saying, but to be brutally honest, that many ‘ands’ really interrupt the flow and personally, I wouldn’t read on. You could rewrite to talk about darkness, matching etc etc
Or take @SimonDoom's sentence and intensify it by saying "I could see the jet black of her hair, her eyebrows, her eyeshadow, her shirt, her lipstick." Impressing that the speaker is intensely aware of every detail.
 
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"Let me at her, just to kiss her on the bed."

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Maybe Santa will bless me. I've been a very good girl after all.
I don't believe that, you don't believe that, and I'm pretty sure Santa doesn't believe that either.
 
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