I'll pay you back

[Teenage Venus]

Ain't had much luck getting anything posted yet. (Maybe I'm too impatient - or just no good.) I've not had any luck finding any editor to comment either. I need to find out if the stories have any appeal to others or not]

Any of you guys fancy passing an honest opinion on any of my short stories? It seems pointless trying to post them if they are crap

I write from personal experiences., or things loosely based on fact. They mostly tend to shock, and some could be catagorised as horror.

I can email a couple of samples if anyone is interested!
I'll pay you back by reading/commenting (honest opinions) on some of your postings .

Anybody fancy helping a little girl out
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[cantdog]

I know, the editor affair is spotty

I offer my services, dear fellow author person.

e-mail is public knowledge:
cantdog@gwi.net
BUT there is a little difficulty between myself and gwi.net right now.

use
slingstone@hotmail.com

cantdog

 

[Guest]

 

[minsue]

Have you tried the Story Feedback forum?

ps Welcome!

 

[Colleen Thomas]

I would suggest checking out the SDC. After offering a couple of critiques on other's work you can have one of your stories workshopped. It's really helpful.

-Colly

 

[Teenage Venus]

Hey, thanks you guys.
I've posted a couple of samples to the first four volunteers. If the format was wrong, please yell and I will re-send them.

Feel free to post comments on here and cut me down to size, 'cos I'm open to honest crit from anyone.

As a newbie I'm just getting the hang of the site. I've given comments/crits on several authors so far, and will try to work out how to use some of those other forums for help.

Really appreciate your offers/advice/suggestions.

Thanks all

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Welcome TV. I see you're a virgen. Let me call Lucky to come and fix that for you.

~A~

 

[Teenage Venus]

Welcome TV. I see you're a virgen.

Somebody has a great sense of humor - but Mummy will be pleased

Ta for the welcome. You know by chance how one loses their virginity on here? (Not figuratively speaking ) Just so long as it don't change me into a 'Monkey' Is it anything to do with number of posts?

Not sure who 'Lucky' is, but if he's hung really well he could REALLY get lucky

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Somebody has a great sense of humor - but Mummy will be pleased

Ta for the welcome. You know by chance how one loses their virginity on here? (Not figuratively speaking ) Just so long as it don't change me into a 'Monkey' Is it anything to do with number of posts?

Not sure who 'Lucky' is, but if he's hung really well he could REALLY get lucky

She's a she, and very persistant as well as sexy. It's an honor to be deflowered by Lucky.

No monkeys here babe, just some fun and really nice folks. Peruse the threads and meet the gang.

 

[Teenage Venus]

Lucky!

He cranks my tractor, that's for damn sure..

I guess this threw me. No problem though 'cos I'm just as partial to a talented lady

PS: You guys - I'm bi, but not a TV, though I know some very nice ones.

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Re: Lucky!

I guess this threw me. No problem though 'cos I'm just as partial to a talented lady

PS: You guys - I'm bi, but not a TV, though I know some very nice ones.

Who isn't these days....LOL.

 

[SummerMorning]

She's a she, and very persistant as well as sexy. It's an honor to be deflowered by Lucky.

No monkeys here babe, just some fun and really nice folks. Peruse the threads and meet the gang.

Except CV. Occasionally, he's a monkey.

 

[lucky-E-leven]

Welcome, Venus...

Slide on over and sit next to Lucky, I'll show you all there is to see here.

First thing's first (after you remove your shirt, of course) your virginity will fall away after a certain number of posts.

Any more information will cost you another article of clothing. If you aren't wearing much to begin with, it's no problem. I accept non-monetary forms of payment as well.



~lucky

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Welcome, Venus...

Slide on over and sit next to Lucky, I'll show you all there is to see here.

First thing's first (after you remove your shirt, of course) your virginity will fall away after a certain number of posts.

Any more information will cost you another article of clothing. If you aren't wearing much to begin with, it's no problem. I accept non-monetary forms of payment as well.



~lucky

Told you she's persistant as well as sexy.

 

[Honey123]

Welcome to Lit, TV...

Anyone of the people who replied here are honest and always ready to help a virgin...(Especially that Lucky!)

Good luck with your stories...pass 'em on - I'd love to help you out - I am not an editor, but I will give an honest opinion

 

[Guest]

 

[lucky-E-leven]

Just as a sidenote: She already said she was not a TV (transvestite) so we might want to give her a nicer nick, like venus...or something like that. Just a thought.

~lucky

 

[Honey123]

Just as a sidenote: She already said she was not a TV (transvestite) so we might want to give her a nicer nick, like venus...or something like that. Just a thought.

~lucky

Thanks for the thump on the head, Lucky!

 

[lucky-E-leven]

Thanks for the thump on the head, Lucky!

Wow! My aim must be way off, or you're moving in on me via 69. Twas supposed to be a smack on the ass.



~lucky

 

[Honey123]

Wow! My aim must be way off, or you're moving in on me via 69. Twas supposed to be a smack on the ass.



~lucky

Well, I didn't say it was with your hand...now did I?

 

[Liar]

Well, I didn't say it was with your hand...now did I?

Touché, I believe. Now just let me adjust the lightning. And....action.

 

[Honey123]

Touché, I believe. Now just let me adjust the lightning. And....action.

Make sure you get my good side, please!!!

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Make sure you get my good side, please!!!

I have a dark side.

 

[Honey123]

I have a dark side.

I knew you weren't a blonde!!! (Is that the part you mean?) LOL

 

[ABSTRUSE]

I knew you weren't a blonde!!! (Is that the part you mean?) LOL

Nope....evil laugh