I Need Help with a Transition

[LGL]

I am writing a story in the first person. My character has spent the last few hours on the beach "enjoying" the scenery". I need to get him in the cabin but I cam having a hard time getting him there.

Does anyone understand?

I am thinking something like this but it just isn't working.

I really wasn't sure what time it was but my growling stomach and slowing warming skin told me it was time to head back to the cabin regardless of the embarressment that might ensue.


Hmm actually I like that. Wow this borad helps even before I get a reply. Thanks literotica. of course I am open to other suggestions.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Natural is usually best when looking for motivation in a transitional scene. The bathroom, food, over ecposure to the sun, having seen enough scenery that a jerk off session is called for. Go with what fits the character best, but og with something natural rather than contrived.

-Colly

 

[Liar]

I probably cheat, but I'd just do a cut. Like in the movies.

"Later, in the cabin, Bob sat down with a cold lemonade and thought of all the first grade poon-tang that he had winessed that afternoon."

Colly's advise is probably better though. Good luck.

#L

 

[Colleen Thomas]

I probably cheat, but I'd just do a cut. Like in the movies.

"Later, in the cabin, Bob sat down with a cold lemonade and thought of all the first grade poon-tang that he had winessed that afternoon."

Colly's advise is probably better though. Good luck.

#L

Colly's advice is barely comprehensible. Yees, does my typing suffer with percocet

-Colly

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

... Yees, does my typing suffer with percocet -Colly

I chalked it up to contemplating all that scenery. http://www.addis-welt.de/smilie/smilie/krank/sick.gif

 

[LGL]

I probably cheat, but I'd just do a cut. Like in the movies.

"Later, in the cabin, Bob sat down with a cold lemonade and thought of all the first grade poon-tang that he had winessed that afternoon."

Colly's advise is probably better though. Good luck.

#L

The cheat. I can never remeber the cheat. I always feel like I have to explain every minute.

I won't cheat in this situation but I will at least remember it for later

thanks

 

[gauchecritic]

When you see movies and then get the DVD with extra footage (Even LOTR) then you see why transitions aren't all that necessary. Lots of time the reason for cutting a scene is "that it doesn't advance the story"

When writing a short story it's generally a good idea to delete scenes in the editing process so as to maintain the flow or pace. (also adding scenes, paragraphs or sentences to slow it down a little)

So unless the guy has something happen to him (stung by a weaver fish) that brings him into contact with really cute lifeguard then there's no real necessity for explaining why he goes.

Perdita recently quoted someone along the lines of "If you mention a gun on the table, make sure it gets used later on."

Sound advice.

Gauche

 

[Guest]

"Later, in the cabin, Bob sat down with a cold lemonade and thought of all the first grade poon-tang that he had winessed that afternoon."

Geez, L., I hope you meant "first rate" poon (vs. first grade age). P.

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

Geez, L., I hope you meant "first rate" poon (vs. first grade age). P.

Ms P,

I think Mr. Liar was thinking about US Grade 'A' Poon, myself.

The last thing we want is any Downer Poon.

http://www.addis-welt.de/smilie/smilie/kotz/711.gif

 

[snooper]

Natural is usually best when looking for motivation in a transitional scene. ...

I agree. If your character is really keen on staying on the beach a sudden hurricane would still do the trick. Or maybe Charles Atlas kicking sand in his face.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Geez, L., I hope you meant "first rate" poon (vs. first grade age). P.

Perdita,

I can just imagine Laurel stumbling across that line and going into cardiac arrest.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[cantdog]

Ms P,

I think Mr. Liar was thinking about US Grade 'A' Poon, myself.

The last thing we want is any Downer Poon.

http://www.addis-welt.de/smilie/smilie/kotz/711.gif

I know I keep thinking about US Grade "A poon!

The sweet patootie, the trim, the quim, the old eternal quiff that man has sought in all ages and in all climes.

cantdog

And skip the transition

 

[gauchecritic]

I agree. If your character is really keen on staying on the beach a sudden hurricane would still do the trick. Or maybe Charles Atlas kicking sand in his face.

At his funeral in 1972 hundreds upon hundreds of mourners lined up in single file to pass by his place of interment and kick sand in his grave.

Gauche

 

[Guest]

At his funeral in 1972 hundreds upon hundreds of mourners lined up in single file to pass by his place of interment and kick sand in his grave.

Two mysteries: 1) Why I think that's brilliant; 2) Why it made me laugh aloud.

Perdita