I need an editor *pouts*

[AmberMoore]

Alright, I know my limitations. I'm working on a short story, when I say short I mean it, it's currently 1,786 words. I have issues with comma usage and I want to make sure that I don't have to many obvious splices. I get kind of lengthy with my sentences and they get away from me.

I just want to tighten it up a little bit and maybe get some help with the structure of it. Of course an opinion of whether or not it's any good would be nice too. I've previously made attempts at stories, and even though I've gotten some good comments people have pointed out some obvious errors. I just want to lessen those this time around.

Would anyone be willing to help me out, it's a short quick read. It takes place between two women in a lesbian bar, I was trying for a really simple almost vignette style of story.

-Amber

 

[_Lynn_]

Alright, I know my limitations. I'm working on a short story, when I say short I mean it, it's currently 1,786 words. I have issues with comma usage and I want to make sure that I don't have to many obvious splices. I get kind of lengthy with my sentences and they get away from me.

I just want to tighten it up a little bit and maybe get some help with the structure of it. Of course an opinion of whether or not it's any good would be nice too. I've previously made attempts at stories, and even though I've gotten some good comments people have pointed out some obvious errors. I just want to lessen those this time around.

Would anyone be willing to help me out, it's a short quick read. It takes place between two women in a lesbian bar, I was trying for a really simple almost vignette style of story.

-Amber

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[AsylumSeeker]

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Hi, ML, *hugs*

Been meaning to PM you, figured I'd see you around here eventually. Hope all is well. Here I am writing contest stories while I keep the editing jobs stacking up <sigh>

Won't win, either. Such is life. Best!

 

[AmberMoore]

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Sorry. It should be fixed now. Thank you for the help, I never would've figured that out.

-Amber

 

[_Lynn_]

Hi, ML, *hugs*

Been meaning to PM you, figured I'd see you around here eventually. Hope all is well. Here I am writing contest stories while I keep the editing jobs stacking up <sigh>

Won't win, either. Such is life. Best!

But you're writing and that's more than I'm managing most of the time. No editing yet -- school takes a lot of my time.

You can PM me anytime.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Sorry. It should be fixed now. Thank you for the help, I never would've figured that out.

-Amber

If you're still looking, a story that short I can edit quickly, if Snooper hasn't already.

 

[AmberMoore]

If you're still looking, a story that short I can edit quickly, if Snooper hasn't already.

I'm still looking. I'll send you a PM and I can get the story to you. Like I said, it's a quick read. I really appreciate the help.

-Amber

 

[AsylumSeeker]

We're good. Taken care of.