I need a little help

[Blavek]

Hi all. I decided to stop just looking at lit and make a contribution. The thing is I am relatively new to writing stories out side of school and I, in my infinate wisdom, decided to write about a topic from a perspective that I can't enter. So I am looking for a woman to describe things to me that are going to range from mild opinions to very sexual descriptions. If this is something you would interested in helping with please PM or leave a post here. Don't email me as I will delete all emails from unknown origin.

Thanks to any and all who offer their help.

 

[damppanties]

decided to write about a topic from a perspective that I can't enter.

I think you should just un-decide and try your hand at something you know thoroughly for this first time.

 

[whispering_surrender]

Re: Re: I need a little help

I think you should just un-decide and try your hand at something you know thoroughly for this first time.

Well, that's actually not bad advice for your first story. But, if you're like me and the story is all written in your head and just needs filling out, you're welcome to ask me questions, and I'll take a shot at answering them. No promises on quality of answers. *grin*

I'm available through PM or email at whispering_surrender@yahoo.com.

Whisper

 

[Gary Chambers]

Re: Re: Re: I need a little help

Well, that's actually not bad advice for your first story. But, if you're like me and the story is all written in your head and just needs filling out, you're welcome to ask me questions, and I'll take a shot at answering them. No promises on quality of answers. *grin*

I'm available through PM or email at whispering_surrender@yahoo.com.

Whisper

I have a few girlfriends who will look over my work to make sure my descriptions of female emotional and physical responses make sense. Such helpers are valuable to any writer. I know writers in other genres who have readers who give their opinions on stories before they are submitted for publication. I'm sure Whisper would be a great choice for any such assistance, and fun too. Having said that, I came up with an axiom the other day that I think helps me understand female characters as I write about them: "A man wants to fill the world with himself, while a woman wants to fill herself with the world."

It's always good advice to write about what you know, but it's a peculiarity of our genre that we all have to write about emotions and sensations we can never experience, unless we write only about gay or lesbian sex. There are some damned good writers on this site, and I think rising to that challenge is one of the things that makes them so good.

Now if I was in New England, I might be popping someone the odd PM saying, "Hey babe, got time for a little research tonight?" But that's another train of thought altogether, and one for which I should probably have my bottom roundly smacked.

 

[KillerMuffin]

Sabledrake
Wicked Eve (if she still has any up)
Darling Nikki
Madame Manga
Natalie Nessus
Risia Skye
Whispersecret
Lauren.Hynde

Hmmm. I can't think of any more off the top of my head.

These authors usually have strong stories with very good emotional and physical reactions written for their female characters.

You have tons of research material already posted at Lit.

 

[Gary Chambers]

...You have tons of research material already posted at Lit.

Agreed, I was just being naughty and you caught me. On the other hand, there's nothing wrong with being extra thorough in one's research. There is a lady nearby who has offered, but she might back off when I show up with a box full of electrodes wired to a vibrator and graphing machine, whereas being a fellow erotica writer, Whisper might think that just sounds like extra fun.

 

[SlaveMasterUK]

a box full of electrodes wired to a vibrator and graphing machine

that's starting to sound like something I'd write...

Anyway, if you're writing from a perspective that "you can't enter" then maybe you should try to enter it. Just use your imagination, make the plot or the characters or whatever it is you're worrying about just happen the way you want it to happen, and THEN start worrying about whether it's right or not.

This is what I did with my first story, which was
a) set in the future
b) about teasing and orgasm denial
c) a lesbian story

Now I have never been to the future, never had a long term orgasm-denial relationship, and I've never been a lesbian (although there is a school of thought that I am in fact a lesbian, trapped in a man's nasty smelly hairy body).

When I had started writing the story I sought the help of an author here, who told me I had nothing to worry about.

So just do it, then ask here if someone would proof-read it for you. I'm sure you'll get plenty of offers, and if you've got the ability to put yourself into your character's head (a must for any fiction writer, I believe) then I don't think the first result will be that bad at all.

ax

 

[Gary Chambers]

...if you're writing from a perspective that "you can't enter" then maybe you should try to enter it. Just use your imagination, make the plot or the characters or whatever it is you're worrying about just happen the way you want it to happen, and THEN start worrying about whether it's right or not...

ax

Yes, that's what I do. When I ask a member of the opposite sex to look a story over, it's usually to check the mechanics of the sensations and emotions, so to speak. Or sometimes, as in a project I'm working on right now for another publisher, a character may be based on someone I know and I'll ask them to look it over for both creative and legal reasons. I think it's a valid way of working, although I agree that the most important thing is to get that first draft done, and worry about fixing and polishing later. To a large extent my earlier posts on this thread were just an attempt at sharing a little humour with Whispering Surrender and anyone else present, but I do also genuinely feel that Blavek is not out of line in asking for a woman's help as he dons his literary boots and marches into the world of the feminine sexual psyche.

I just read part one and into part two of Rhiana. You seem skilled at describing that intimate side of a feminine character, but perhaps Blavek feels he needs some help approaching your level. Writing good literature is not the easiest thing a person can undertake. Truman Capote was asked once what it was like to write a novel. He said it was like giving birth to a grand piano. I think he was being a bit melodramatic for comedic purposes, but we all know that there are days when the words flow with greater difficulty than on other days. Whatever you do to get the best end result is valid, and what works for one may not work so well for another.

I've said before that one of the nice things about Literotica is that it enables us not only to share our finished work with the public, but also provides a means for us to share our craft with each other. Who but another erotica writer can truly understand the triumphs and challenges of creating a worthwhile erotic story?

 

[whispering_surrender]

Agreed, I was just being naughty and you caught me. On the other hand, there's nothing wrong with being extra thorough in one's research. There is a lady nearby who has offered, but she might back off when I show up with a box full of electrodes wired to a vibrator and graphing machine, whereas being a fellow erotica writer, Whisper might think that just sounds like extra fun.

Who? *looks around* Me?

Whisper

Ps. *laughs*

 

[Blavek]

Thanks

Thanks guys for your help. I am really interested mostly in the physical sensations from a female perspective. Any body can write this paragraph ...

Almost by instinct I found my hand running along my belly down to a soft muffin of hair rolling around in my vagina. It was like it knew what to do with my having to guess at what felt right or relying on another person. This feeling was truly stunning as I had free reign over this new body and the more I explored the more I got turned on by the fact that it belonged to me. I had some many things I need to explore with this body but for now I was content to push and pull at my lips, And spread my pussy open to allow a finger to probe inside a little. Then as I pulled my hand away I brushed against my clit. I will never know how I could have forgotten that but I felt a huge surge inside me. I brushed against it again. Soaked in my own juices I I was slippery and I got just a dab of friction against my clit and I could again feel that building inside was pure energy waiting to reach critical mass. My gyrations grew faster and I found my fingers getting deeper into my pussy. What a strange feeling it is to feel something violate you but also love the feeling it gives you. The more I spread my pussy open the hotter and wetter I got. I also kept working at my clit and soon I was going to burst. My pink nub was screaming for more and deep cavern was aching to be stretched and probed and I was moving with such velocity over my parts I feared I was going to tear them from my body. Then it happened. My whole body shuddered and my pussy caught on fire with passion and juice flowed from my body as waves of pleasure resonate up my spine into my head.

... Which is good enough in its own right but I want to REALLY understand what it feels like and not through out generic steryotypical encounters. And what good would my story be if everytime I need a woman to have an orgasm I threw out a regurgitated copy of that. See my main character is really a guy based on myself that gets put into the body of a woman so I can write about how he feels and how he reacts as a she because its how I would react but the mechanics so to speak is what I need. I kind of want to find an interesting twist that maybe people haven't hit on before. Also i'm not exactly new to writing (spelling aside) or to viewing a story in my head, just new to this kind of aspect of writing.
I read a lot and play a lot of story driven games so I have a sense of how things should flow, and I have a good sense of when to deviate and what not. SO I may very well be hitting on some of you for some assistence and I will likely read your stories. Also I appreciate and and all critisism of the paragraph above as it is actually the last scene I wrote in the story. And remember critisism of weak or poor aspects will do me much more good then saying it was nice. allthough if it is good I want to know what about it was good. Thanks again folks.

 

[Gary Chambers]

Re: Thanks

Thanks guys for your help. I am really interested mostly in the physical sensations from a female perspective....See my main character is really a guy based on myself that gets put into the body of a woman so I can write about how he feels and how he reacts as a she because its how I would react but the mechanics so to speak is what I need.

I understand and agree with your approach, but I must point something out. In the past few days I've been getting some indirect but reliable feedback from a transsexual who recently changed from a male into female. From what I can understand, though said transsexual is happier having made the switch, the person inside is still unsure whether he/she feels the feminine sensations and emotions in the same way as other women.

I must confess I'm fairly proud of this: "A man wants to fill the world with himself, while a woman wants to fill herself with the world."

I still stand to be corrected, but I've yet to find a woman, natural or transsexual, who considers that statement untrue. Best of luck Blavek, I hope Whisper and others can help steer your creative mindset where you want it to be.

 

[Blavek]

Thanks. My character however isn't a transexual. He was put into a she and eventually I think he'll be able to go back and forth between the two.. I am kind of writing a novella here I guess. but he was literally put into a womans body.

 

[Black Tulip]

Re: Thanks

A few points that really screamed out at me.

a soft muffin of hair rolling around in my vagina What do you mean here? Not the tail of a dog I hope.

to push and pull at my lips
I would prefer stroking, feeling, manipulating. Pushing and pulling is more in order with things that have weight. You're talking about soft tissue here.

a huge surge
Not right away. I'd say start with tingles, small electrical shocks like when you get static.
It's not the kick starter of a Harley Davidson. Ha, you wish!

I feared I was going to tear them from my body.
Maybe that goes for manipulating a penis. I don't know, but no way I'll ever have a fear of tearing parts from my body. If you want violent contact, go for rubbing so hard you are in danger of causing burn marks.

pleasure resonate up my spine into my head.
From my nipples to my clit would be more in style.

Keep in mind that this is only me talking.
Pay attention to the sensations in your own body and use those. I did when writing from a male perspective. So far nobody mailed me to ask if I had lost my marbles.

 

[Blavek]

Thanks for your input. I'll definately take it into consideration