Help please

[uksnowy]

Help!! Not being one and just for a change – not a challenge I am trying to describe a lesbian sex scene into my latest epic and would appreciate ideas, actions. It's only going to be maybe two paras long and possibly a later scene.
The characters are 52 and 30, total strangers but new business associates, the 30 being a very rich client of the business owner. It's set in the latter's office.

Any ideas most welcome

 

[DrDelirium]

Help!! Not being one and just for a change – not a challenge I am trying to describe a lesbian sex scene into my latest epic and would appreciate ideas, actions. It's only going to be maybe two paras long and possibly a later scene.
The characters are 52 and 30, total strangers but new business associates, the 30 being a very rich client of the business owner. It's set in the latter's office.

Any ideas most welcome

I'm not one either, but unless you're going for gritty realism I might be able to suggest some tropes. What you describe suggests some potential for non-con, dom-sub dynamic, but it could go either way depending on the other elements. Or is it just a beautiful love story?

 

[Carnevil9]

Head to your favorite porn site and do some research!

 

[LeandraNyx]

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[uksnowy]

Thanks all.

They will not be long paras, it will be mostly cunnilingus in the time frame of them meeting for the first time.
I think I know or can can guess how they have sex, it's actions and sensations I would like to describe.
I don't have a favourite porn site

 

[BuckyDuckman]

Thanks all.

They will not be long paras, it will be mostly cunnilingus in the time frame of them meeting for the first time.
I think I know or can can guess how they have sex, it's actions and sensations I would like to describe.
I don't have a favourite porn site

Worry more about how your characters feel having lesbian sex than worrying about how to describe the minutia of what they're doing to each other. Yes, they went down on each other. So what? Big deal! Lesbians have been going down on each other since before there were writers to describe the activity. Who cares?

What we DO care about, though, is how it feels for the people (characters) doing it. Okay, so you just tasted pussy for the first time or the hundredth time - who cares? Please tell me how it makes you feel to do it!

 

[uksnowy]

I don't write like that thanks.
I like the minutia, not feelings as such. How they act and what they would do

 

[FortySixtyFour]

I feel like if you don't really take feelings into account, your sex scene is going to feel bland and mechanical. Most of sex is actually in your head, whether you end up examining your feelings there closely or not. Desire and lust, moreso than any physical sensation, are what drive sex, and they're endlessly variable between different peoples' perspectives and experiences, which is basically the whole fun part of reading and writing erotica.

But what you're actually looking for right now is probably clever methods of phrasing things to engage the readers, and you're gonna have to draw deep from your own imagination for that. You can see what the characters are doing in your head, now explain and describe it for the readers. If anything I'd say avoiding or toning down the similes and metaphors you use, as a lot of rookie writers (and too many professional ones) make some really out there and ridiculous ones. I came here to be mildly aroused, not to do a spit-take on my screen and fall out of my seat, clutching my sides with laughter.

 

[Handley_Page]

Thanks all.

They will not be long paras, it will be mostly cunnilingus in the time frame of them meeting for the first time.
I think I know or can can guess how they have sex, it's actions and sensations I would like to describe.
I don't have a favourite porn site

Oh, Snowy, you will not lack for suggestions, I think.
There are some Very Good stories in the "Lesbian sex" story category.

for example:-
A Lesbian Love Story- of Sorts; By silkstockingslover
Laura, By TxRad
My Lingerie, Her Lingerie, by grayshade

to name only three.

 

[uksnowy]

Thanks Handley, 4064, Barry. I have left it as I thought, probably crap but must get on.

 

[Smokey125]

Hey, uksnowy...

...Lesbian Sex is my specialty. Feel free to contact me if you wanna discuss ideas or content. —S

 

[uksnowy]

Thanks Smokey. The story wouldn't get in here as it features bestiality. It's in Stories on Line

 

[EquinoxRising]

So, you're asking Lit author's for help on your story you won't post here because you know it breaks this site's rules? FYI, you cannot advertise for the competitor.

 

[Smokey125]

No problem—

Best of luck in your endeavors.

 

[KindofHere]

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[DrDelirium]

So, you're asking Lit author's for help on your story you won't post here because you know it breaks this site's rules? FYI, you cannot advertise for the competitor.

I get Lit's rules and that mentioning another site by name might be a faux pas, but is being on Lit supposed to be an exclusive arrangement? Are people only supposed to help Our Team? I kind of feel like if Lit wants to ban a certain kind of story, that's fine, but then another site publishing that kind of story is not 'competing.' Telling others about it should not be a bad thing. Sometimes I feel like the biggest fetish on here is tribalism.

 

[KindofHere]

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[AwkwardMD]

I didn't know Lit had a resident jester!

 

[EquinoxRising]

I get Lit's rules and that mentioning another site by name might be a faux pas, but is being on Lit supposed to be an exclusive arrangement? Are people only supposed to help Our Team? I kind of feel like if Lit wants to ban a certain kind of story, that's fine, but then another site publishing that kind of story is not 'competing.' Telling others about it should not be a bad thing. Sometimes I feel like the biggest fetish on here is tribalism.

Other story sites are "competition" (and mentioning/linking/advertising your works there is SPAM in the eyes of the owners) even if they allow some content Lit does not. It is, at least, in bad taste to ask other Lit members for help on a story you know you'll never post here.

 

[DrDelirium]

You're a fucking twat and you disguise your bullshit through intellectual style. If you don't know the answer to your question, then go fuck yourself.

Q.E.D. Thanks!

 

[Bramblethorn]

I get Lit's rules and that mentioning another site by name might be a faux pas, but is being on Lit supposed to be an exclusive arrangement? Are people only supposed to help Our Team? I kind of feel like if Lit wants to ban a certain kind of story, that's fine, but then another site publishing that kind of story is not 'competing.' Telling others about it should not be a bad thing. Sometimes I feel like the biggest fetish on here is tribalism.

Lit allows people to discuss and even advertise their work on other sites, to a point. I can plug my Smashwords offerings in my sig, in my profile, and in this sticky'd thread. We discuss stuff like Amazon publishing fairly often; I opened a thread on that recently and so far nobody's modded it. People have also discussed how they market their works on pay sites.

I think the issue here was that people weren't aware that Snowy was asking for help with an off-Lit story, in a category that's banned here.

 

[DrDelirium]

Lit allows people to discuss and even advertise their work on other sites, to a point. I can plug my Smashwords offerings in my sig, in my profile, and in this sticky'd thread. We discuss stuff like Amazon publishing fairly often; I opened a thread on that recently and so far nobody's modded it. People have also discussed how they market their works on pay sites.

I think the issue here was that people weren't aware that Snowy was asking for help with an off-Lit story, in a category that's banned here.

Good to know. Thanks.

 

[uksnowy]

Bramble, in my initial request I did not say my tale is in a banned category, that would be pointless.
It was purely an appeal to those that know, as I am not a lesbian. Anyway it's complete and published somewhere else.
Thanks