Hello, I need help, please.

[MakeMeSayPlease]

This is my first time asking for help outside my little circle of friends, so I hope I'm doing this correctly. I would like to ask for fresh eyes to look at something I'm working on. It's non-con, parallel universe, kind of. 2,883 word count so far, but some of it isnt filled in yet. I have a terrible habit of switching tenses and it would be helpful if someone could point out any mistakes I missed correcting. I would also appreciate opinions or insight into the plot, or if anything comes across confusing or otherwise awkward. Thank you for your consideration, please send me a message if you're interested. -MMSP