Flash Poetry

[Chris_R_O]

Usually when I write poems, I skip a lot of connecting words and focus on descriptive ones. I try to create flashing images for the reader. An embrace to a kiss to touch, something like that. A quick example:

"The shadows flicker, candle light. Flame dancing, reflected in her eyes. Burning hatred, an image of her soul. The hand that beats her, pain binding purpose. Flurry of violence, she ends him. Freedom gained, the price is darkness."

This basically represents the style i use most. Flashes of emotion and images.
I am simply looking for feedback, your opinions on the style i use. Is it sound? Limiting? Interesting or boring? Does it lack substance? Please, tell me what you think.

Chris_R_O

 

[Senna Jawa]

"The shadows flicker, candle light. Flame dancing, reflected in her eyes. Burning hatred, an image of her soul. The hand that beats her, pain binding purpose. Flurry of violence, she ends him. Freedom gained, the price is darkness."

This basically represents the style i use most. Flashes of emotion and images.
I am simply looking for feedback, your opinions on the style i use. Is it sound? Limiting? Interesting or boring? Does it lack substance? Please, tell me what you think.

Chris_R_O

A style is a style, it's neither good nor bad, it depends on how you execute it. Your example has all kind of problems.

Is it limiting? Certainly, of course, but it still gives you enough of scope for an unlimited number of poems. Of certain poems and not of other poems.

 

[HomerPindar]

Usually when I write poems, I skip a lot of connecting words and focus on descriptive ones. I try to create flashing images for the reader. An embrace to a kiss to touch, something like that. A quick example:

"The shadows flicker, candle light. Flame dancing, reflected in her eyes. Burning hatred, an image of her soul. The hand that beats her, pain binding purpose. Flurry of violence, she ends him. Freedom gained, the price is darkness."

This basically represents the style i use most. Flashes of emotion and images.
I am simply looking for feedback, your opinions on the style i use. Is it sound? Limiting? Interesting or boring? Does it lack substance? Please, tell me what you think.

Chris_R_O

Is it sound?
Who's to say it's not? It is, in the voice of my recent Poetry teacher, in the field of radical poetry, and as that field is defined by breaking definitions, have at it. Ok, so that last part isn't in the teachers voice.

Interesting or boring?
Subjective, opinion based responses are all you'll get to such a question. Careful of the question, least you get into useless debates with the person answering and not the subject at hand.

Does it lack substance?
Again, fairly opinionated responses here. Consider, do The Ramones lack substance? They're a five cord punk band, love em, but substance to me isn't to another.

Work on it, keep at it. And heck, start a whole new form, give it name, make millions, retire young, come back and teach us something or three.

NOW, do I like it? yeah, it makes the common uncommon, or the uncommon common. It plays with words and images at once. You might want to look up flash fiction (I Think that's what it's call) Super Super short stories, a couple of pages tops. This form of prose is begining to cross the line into radical prose poetry - it depends on if the author can make a sale as a poet or as a short story writer

HomerPindar