First timer looking for an editor for an interracial story

[katie_]

Hi all,

I've written my first literotica story, basically my own sexual fantasy. It is in the first person, about a young girl (white) and her black lover, giving background on the relationship, building up to their first sexual experience together.

It's gone through one experienced editor already, who did a great job of correcting basic grammar mistakes and an even better job of breaking down some of my longer sentences into smaller, more readable ones (I've a tendancy to be long-winded, can you tell? ).

I'm looking for another pair of eyes to read the story and give me some more stylistic advice. I've seen people complaining about reading stories involving stereotypical large black men and more petite white girls - sorry, but thats my fantasy... if you're one of those people, please don't volunteer, as you won't enjoy the story More than half the story builds up to the sexual encounter and a lot of time is spent inside the girl's head, exploring the interracial taboo that I find so fascinating... so it's not 'just' a quick sex scene.

The story is nearly 10 pages long and I worry that it's better told in two or three less pages.

So in summary, I'm looking for someone who is positive (this is my first story!), patient (it's probably too wordy), experienced (I have read many Lit stories but certainly not as many as a lot of other editors) and preferably someone who is somewhat interested in black guy - white girl interracial taboo, as that's the 'category.'

Thanks ahead of time... sorry if I've been too specific (or not specific enough?).

 

[AsylumSeeker]

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With that said I can be your editor and mentor both. I have extended this offer to several writers. In my experience 1 of 3 will respond.

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The next move is yours.

Hi all,

I've written my first literotica story, basically my own sexual fantasy. It is in the first person, about a young girl (white) and her black lover, giving background on the relationship, building up to their first sexual experience together.

It's gone through one experienced editor already, who did a great job of correcting basic grammar mistakes and an even better job of breaking down some of my longer sentences into smaller, more readable ones (I've a tendancy to be long-winded, can you tell? ).

I'm looking for another pair of eyes to read the story and give me some more stylistic advice. I've seen people complaining about reading stories involving stereotypical large black men and more petite white girls - sorry, but thats my fantasy... if you're one of those people, please don't volunteer, as you won't enjoy the story More than half the story builds up to the sexual encounter and a lot of time is spent inside the girl's head, exploring the interracial taboo that I find so fascinating... so it's not 'just' a quick sex scene.

The story is nearly 10 pages long and I worry that it's better told in two or three less pages.

So in summary, I'm looking for someone who is positive (this is my first story!), patient (it's probably too wordy), experienced (I have read many Lit stories but certainly not as many as a lot of other editors) and preferably someone who is somewhat interested in black guy - white girl interracial taboo, as that's the 'category.'

Thanks ahead of time... sorry if I've been too specific (or not specific enough?).