NewMountain80
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This is the first story I've published here that is (partially) told from a female point of view.
https://www.literotica.com/s/his-turn-her-turn
An excerpt:
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You know he would stop in a heartbeat if you asked him to; you had even agreed on a safe word, but you don't want him to stop.
The cold stone feels good against your flushed skin, and you whimper, your voice breaking even as your hips rock back to meet him. The pain, the shame, and the thrill tangle together into something so raw it nearly shatters you.
Every brutal thrust drives that feeling deeper into your cunt, your spine, your mind. You're not supposed to want this. Women fear this. YOU fear this. The sheer wrongness of it, the danger, and the helplessness, itched a dark part of your psyche that even now made you feel ashamed to explore.
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I like to think I was able to realistically convey the feelings and emotions the character was experiencing in the scene as a whole but of course, being a man, I'm not sure if I did an adequate job expressing the mind of a woman.
I would really appreciate some feedback on this, as I am currently working on several more stories that include female points of view and I want them to seem as real as possible.
So, how did I do?
https://www.literotica.com/s/his-turn-her-turn
An excerpt:
----
You know he would stop in a heartbeat if you asked him to; you had even agreed on a safe word, but you don't want him to stop.
The cold stone feels good against your flushed skin, and you whimper, your voice breaking even as your hips rock back to meet him. The pain, the shame, and the thrill tangle together into something so raw it nearly shatters you.
Every brutal thrust drives that feeling deeper into your cunt, your spine, your mind. You're not supposed to want this. Women fear this. YOU fear this. The sheer wrongness of it, the danger, and the helplessness, itched a dark part of your psyche that even now made you feel ashamed to explore.
----
I like to think I was able to realistically convey the feelings and emotions the character was experiencing in the scene as a whole but of course, being a man, I'm not sure if I did an adequate job expressing the mind of a woman.
I would really appreciate some feedback on this, as I am currently working on several more stories that include female points of view and I want them to seem as real as possible.
So, how did I do?