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One day, a picture popped into my head of a woman bent over in the doggie-style position saying, “Give me all your power”. That was the origin of this story.
Initially, I only had a few scenes. I sent to TM the first section of the story on 8/5/24, which went to the first practice session with Ross and his mom. On 8/9, I sent TM the next section, which went through the first practice session where the mom caught the balls with her chest. Then the story went on shelf.
On 4/29/25, I sent TM the next section. I had done a lot of rewriting, but not making a lot of progress in getting the story down. I had now written the first four sentences of the section that started with “Nothing too new happened over the next four weeks”.
I made steady progress from there. On 5/16, I sent TM the section that ended with the first fuck. I started writing the next day. I got to the mom starting a large spiel about how them having sex would be okay. I just didn’t like it, though I wasn’t sure why. I shelved the story again.
On 8/5, I sent TM the next section. I had decided what was wrong with what I don’t think the decision to commit incest should be a cold, logical decision. Instead, it should be something that comes from the heart while the couple is together (I’m talking about sexual fantasy, not real-life incest). So I rewrote the day after scene to the mom steadily ramping up the sex with Ross while having him choose to do each step. That section ended with Ross and his mom going to her bedroom. On 8/11, I finished the story.
Time for editing. I spend so much time on my edits. One thing I rewrote during this time was the scene where Ross directly applies his power to his mom’s tits. Initially, the mom starts with the suggestion that Ross directly apply his power to her by putting her hands on her tits. I thought that was too abrupt. I changed it to Mom suggesting a couple of different ways of Ross directly applying his power before eventually coming up with putting his hands on her tits.
I did one thing differently during the editing process. With this story, I did as I did with all my recent stories - I used Grammarly to do my first editing pass of the story. Then I slowly read through the story to catch additional errors. Then I look for “bad words” that I overuse or misuse. I did all that and sent my story to my initial editor. After I incorporated his feedback, I did something I had never done before - I used Word’s grammar checker. It caught a lot of errors. The most common error it caught was me not putting a comma after “so” when it’s used as an interjection. (“So I tried something new” should be “So, I tried something new”)
I like the plot and the characters, but what makes this story special to me is the sex; Ross using electrical power to excite his mom. My beta-reader djrip suggested that I expand on the electrical power in the sex scenes. It was his suggestions that I describe how the mom’s tit is deformed and rebounds after a ball hits it and that I describe the electricity arcing from Ross to his mom.
What is the mom’s first name? She doesn’t have one. Nothing ever came to me for her first name.
Some Q&A with one of my beta-readers:
> I guess it implies the government already knew about Ross’s electricity powers?
Correct. As Ross is the child of two people who worked for The Agency, it has known he's a single since before his birth and has closely monitored him. The Agency redid the spare bedroom into a media room that Ross could use to practice his electricity powers.
> does Ross’s mom really need an actual cover job?
Yes. She'll do her cover job very part-time (say 8 hours a week). Superheroes are celebrities, and The Agency doesn't want the media following them around all the time. Also, there are only a few superheroes in most cities. The Agency is worried that supervillains would launch a preemptive strike on them, taking out early the only people capable of capturing them.
> I think the reader can tell that the electricity receiving turns her on, but is that also apparent to Ross? He doesn’t
> seem to put that together until she actually asks him to have sex, where it seems like he could’ve wondered more
> if these training sessions were also acting as a turn-on for her.
My take is that Ross is slow to think of his mom as a sexual being. She's always been this asexual mother-figure who, not only has never had sex that he's known of, but has never even dated that he's known of. Their practicing together has led his mom for the first time to talk about her and his father being intimate. Also, Ross is very inexperienced. He can tell his mom is sexually enjoying practicing with him, but he can't judge how much and what that actually means in terms of their relationship. Consequently, he plays it safe, not doing much more than what she's explicitly told him to do. He does figure out that she's okay with him occasionally squeezing her tits while he's directly applying power, but the doesn't want to push it for feat that she'll take umbrage and stop practicing with him.
> I hate to bring this up since there doesn’t appear to be a solution, but Lion Boy and his mother evading capture still by
> the end isn’t fully satisfying. But I know writing their capture would be thousands of more words and ultimately has no
> point. Maybe an epilogue where Ross is in the field? Sorry I don’t have any good suggestions.
I can see that the end isn't fully satisfying with Lion Boy and his mom still free. Could I have someone drop by right after dinner and announce that they've been captured? I guess. But I'd think for their capture to be truly satisfying, it needs to be a long, drawn-out affair with Ross coming up with at least one clever solution that permits them to be captured.
One of my editors suggested that I expand this into a 5-chapter series that ends with Ross capturing Lion Boy and Roaring Pantheress. But what sexual content would I put into such a series? Ross and his mom fucking in different ways? That would get boring. Typically in such a series, the male character bangs a new female character each chapter and winds up with a harem. I don't want to go down the route. Another option would be to have Ross and his mom as minor characters in the middle chapters and new characters start incestuous relationships. But that would involve coming up with a huge amount of story content that I can't currently picture. The main thing I can’t picture is how to satisfyingly spread the hunt for Lion Boy and Roaring Pantheress over five chapters.
Initially, I only had a few scenes. I sent to TM the first section of the story on 8/5/24, which went to the first practice session with Ross and his mom. On 8/9, I sent TM the next section, which went through the first practice session where the mom caught the balls with her chest. Then the story went on shelf.
On 4/29/25, I sent TM the next section. I had done a lot of rewriting, but not making a lot of progress in getting the story down. I had now written the first four sentences of the section that started with “Nothing too new happened over the next four weeks”.
I made steady progress from there. On 5/16, I sent TM the section that ended with the first fuck. I started writing the next day. I got to the mom starting a large spiel about how them having sex would be okay. I just didn’t like it, though I wasn’t sure why. I shelved the story again.
On 8/5, I sent TM the next section. I had decided what was wrong with what I don’t think the decision to commit incest should be a cold, logical decision. Instead, it should be something that comes from the heart while the couple is together (I’m talking about sexual fantasy, not real-life incest). So I rewrote the day after scene to the mom steadily ramping up the sex with Ross while having him choose to do each step. That section ended with Ross and his mom going to her bedroom. On 8/11, I finished the story.
Time for editing. I spend so much time on my edits. One thing I rewrote during this time was the scene where Ross directly applies his power to his mom’s tits. Initially, the mom starts with the suggestion that Ross directly apply his power to her by putting her hands on her tits. I thought that was too abrupt. I changed it to Mom suggesting a couple of different ways of Ross directly applying his power before eventually coming up with putting his hands on her tits.
I did one thing differently during the editing process. With this story, I did as I did with all my recent stories - I used Grammarly to do my first editing pass of the story. Then I slowly read through the story to catch additional errors. Then I look for “bad words” that I overuse or misuse. I did all that and sent my story to my initial editor. After I incorporated his feedback, I did something I had never done before - I used Word’s grammar checker. It caught a lot of errors. The most common error it caught was me not putting a comma after “so” when it’s used as an interjection. (“So I tried something new” should be “So, I tried something new”)
I like the plot and the characters, but what makes this story special to me is the sex; Ross using electrical power to excite his mom. My beta-reader djrip suggested that I expand on the electrical power in the sex scenes. It was his suggestions that I describe how the mom’s tit is deformed and rebounds after a ball hits it and that I describe the electricity arcing from Ross to his mom.
What is the mom’s first name? She doesn’t have one. Nothing ever came to me for her first name.
Some Q&A with one of my beta-readers:
> I guess it implies the government already knew about Ross’s electricity powers?
Correct. As Ross is the child of two people who worked for The Agency, it has known he's a single since before his birth and has closely monitored him. The Agency redid the spare bedroom into a media room that Ross could use to practice his electricity powers.
> does Ross’s mom really need an actual cover job?
Yes. She'll do her cover job very part-time (say 8 hours a week). Superheroes are celebrities, and The Agency doesn't want the media following them around all the time. Also, there are only a few superheroes in most cities. The Agency is worried that supervillains would launch a preemptive strike on them, taking out early the only people capable of capturing them.
> I think the reader can tell that the electricity receiving turns her on, but is that also apparent to Ross? He doesn’t
> seem to put that together until she actually asks him to have sex, where it seems like he could’ve wondered more
> if these training sessions were also acting as a turn-on for her.
My take is that Ross is slow to think of his mom as a sexual being. She's always been this asexual mother-figure who, not only has never had sex that he's known of, but has never even dated that he's known of. Their practicing together has led his mom for the first time to talk about her and his father being intimate. Also, Ross is very inexperienced. He can tell his mom is sexually enjoying practicing with him, but he can't judge how much and what that actually means in terms of their relationship. Consequently, he plays it safe, not doing much more than what she's explicitly told him to do. He does figure out that she's okay with him occasionally squeezing her tits while he's directly applying power, but the doesn't want to push it for feat that she'll take umbrage and stop practicing with him.
> I hate to bring this up since there doesn’t appear to be a solution, but Lion Boy and his mother evading capture still by
> the end isn’t fully satisfying. But I know writing their capture would be thousands of more words and ultimately has no
> point. Maybe an epilogue where Ross is in the field? Sorry I don’t have any good suggestions.
I can see that the end isn't fully satisfying with Lion Boy and his mom still free. Could I have someone drop by right after dinner and announce that they've been captured? I guess. But I'd think for their capture to be truly satisfying, it needs to be a long, drawn-out affair with Ross coming up with at least one clever solution that permits them to be captured.
One of my editors suggested that I expand this into a 5-chapter series that ends with Ross capturing Lion Boy and Roaring Pantheress. But what sexual content would I put into such a series? Ross and his mom fucking in different ways? That would get boring. Typically in such a series, the male character bangs a new female character each chapter and winds up with a harem. I don't want to go down the route. Another option would be to have Ross and his mom as minor characters in the middle chapters and new characters start incestuous relationships. But that would involve coming up with a huge amount of story content that I can't currently picture. The main thing I can’t picture is how to satisfyingly spread the hunt for Lion Boy and Roaring Pantheress over five chapters.
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