First Time Writer...

[james_futuo]

Hello,

My name is James. I just found the site about a week ago and wrote my first erotic story over the last couple of days. I'm not sure if I'm any good, so I was scanning the boards and I'm just looking for people who want to read my rough draft and give an honest opinion.

It's just under 8,000 words at the moment and I'm not really sure what genre it's in (like I said, I'm kind of new to this). And as far as any editing, I'm willing to take tips, I guess, I just can't promise I'll use them before I submit.

If you'd like to read my story, send me a pm.

Thanks.

 

[sadangel]

Hello,

My name is James. I just found the site about a week ago and wrote my first erotic story over the last couple of days. I'm not sure if I'm any good, so I was scanning the boards and I'm just looking for people who want to read my rough draft and give an honest opinion.

It's just under 8,000 words at the moment and I'm not really sure what genre it's in (like I said, I'm kind of new to this). And as far as any editing, I'm willing to take tips, I guess, I just can't promise I'll use them before I submit.

If you'd like to read my story, send me a pm.

Thanks.

My first suggestion is that if you get someone to read it and comment, take it and use the comments to better the story. If not for someone reading my first story and taking the time to edit it and point out problems, my story would have tanked before it was posted. I had many things to change, but it was worth it! This person also gave me praise for things well done. If you don't plan to use the tips, then why bother to have anyone read it to see if it is any good.

That's just my .02 cents.

 

[james_futuo]

Yeah. As I reread what I originally wrote, I admit, it sounds ignorant. I didn't mean it as definitively as it sounded. Essentially, I'm just curious to hear if I'm any good before I consider submitting.

 

[jomar]

You'll probably have better luck in the the story feedback forum for your particular request. Good luck.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

i'll take a read and comment. not that my opinion will be worth too much, but at least it'll be an opinion.

 

[glynndah]

A welcome for the little newbie from the good little witch.

If you're still looking for opinions, I'll be happy to give you mine.

 

[_Lynn_]

Welcome to the AH.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Hi, James, and welcome to the AH. This is a nice place to hang out and exchange pictures of grandchildren and flirt and argue politics. It's also pretty good for specific questions about some point in a story that is in progress.

However, it's not such a great place to get opinions on your stories. You might contact the editors or check with the story feedback forum.

 

[TE999]

Welcome to the AH, James. Good luck with your first story.

 

[slyc_willie]

Just popping in to welcome the new member. Er, person.

Welcome to the AH, James.

 

[ms.read]

Welcome james. I'd be happy to take a look at it.

 

[james_futuo]

Thanks

Thank you for the welcome...

I hope you all enjoy my stuff...once they approve it...

It sure does take a while, yes? I'm not complaining, I just feel like I'm being forced to sit on my hands...

Thanks again.

jf

 

[Boxlicker101]

Thank you for the welcome...

I hope you all enjoy my stuff...once they approve it...

It sure does take a while, yes? I'm not complaining, I just feel like I'm being forced to sit on my hands...

Thanks again.

jf

Hey, peeps! Do you think we can count this last post as **THE QUESTION** ?

If you submitted the story on the 19th,. today is the 21st and it should be posted tomorrow. It takes about three days, but after the Summer Lovin' Contest starts, it will take longer. That shouldn't affect this story, though.

That's assuming it will be accepted, of course.

 

[BOSTONFICTIONWRITER]

Hello,

My name is James. I just found the site about a week ago and wrote my first erotic story over the last couple of days. I'm not sure if I'm any good, so I was scanning the boards and I'm just looking for people who want to read my rough draft and give an honest opinion.

It's just under 8,000 words at the moment and I'm not really sure what genre it's in (like I said, I'm kind of new to this). And as far as any editing, I'm willing to take tips, I guess, I just can't promise I'll use them before I submit.

If you'd like to read my story, send me a pm.

Thanks.

Jimmy, Jimmy, Jimmy, what are you doin' posting here? You gave me the honor of reading your story. It's good, real good, and you're a good writer, better than most of the nitwits who write here.

Only, it's not finished. I hope you don't post it the way that it is. Did you submit it?

You need to get a publisher and not one of those rip off E-book publishers, but a real publisher. You have real talent. You're wasting your time here.

Expand what you have to novel length. The five characters that you created are all engaging and worthy of 3 or 4 chapters on their own. Now the main character is the real focus and you've already penned him as a winner.

Moreover, I'd like to read more about the old albeit hot broad that he has sex with after failing the crack her safe, the one with the shotgun.

If you had to post this piece, you should have made it a summer piece and posted in the contest. It would have won. Who knows, maybe Laurel will award you with her green E. It's that good.

There, you go. Now that I gave you my stamp of approval the nitwits will all read your story, and when they do, they'll all be jealous of the talent of a real writer.

By the way, don't be offended when they think that you are me or I am you. That's just how they are around here, small and narrow minded.

Good luck to you,

Freddie

 

[impressive]

Welcome & best of luck with the endeavor.

 

[james_futuo]

Jimmy, Jimmy, Jimmy, what are you doin' posting here? You gave me the honor of reading your story. It's good, real good, and you're a good writer, better than most of the nitwits who write here.

Only, it's not finished. I hope you don't post it the way that it is. Did you submit it?

You need to get a publisher and not one of those rip off E-book publishers, but a real publisher. You have real talent. You're wasting your time here.

Expand what you have to novel length. The five characters that you created are all engaging and worthy of 3 or 4 chapters on their own. Now the main character is the real focus and you've already penned him as a winner.

Moreover, I'd like to read more about the old albeit hot broad that he has sex with after failing the crack her safe, the one with the shotgun.

If you had to post this piece, you should have made it a summer piece and posted in the contest. It would have won. Who knows, maybe Laurel will award you with her green E. It's that good.

There, you go. Now that I gave you my stamp of approval the nitwits will all read your story, and when they do, they'll all be jealous of the talent of a real writer.

By the way, don't be offended when they think that you are me or I am you. That's just how they are around here, small and narrow minded.

Good luck to you,

Freddie

Freddie, I don't show my writing to anyone. That's why I'm using the beauty of internet anonymity to build up my nerve.

Anyway, thanks again for the compliments, and the check is in the mail for the agreed upon amount...ha!

And yes, I posted it as is. Maybe I'll expand on it one of these days...when I figure out or know how to solicit a publisher and stuff.

As for the summer contest, I've got something I've drawn up and it should be finished by the middle of next week. Do you have something for the contest?


james

 

[BOSTONFICTIONWRITER]

Freddie, I don't show my writing to anyone. That's why I'm using the beauty of internet anonymity to build up my nerve.

Anyway, thanks again for the compliments, and the check is in the mail for the agreed upon amount...ha!

And yes, I posted it as is. Maybe I'll expand on it one of these days...when I figure out or know how to solicit a publisher and stuff.

As for the summer contest, I've got something I've drawn up and it should be finished by the middle of next week. Do you have something for the contest?


james

Get yourself a copy of Writer's Market. The book list nearly every publisher. Follow their guidelines and write a good query. Good luck, only, you don't need any luck. You have real talent, a gift.