Feedback request: The Eating Challenge

[sugarcrybaby]

Hi there! I used to submit stories to Literotica many years ago, and have rediscovered a longing to write erotic stuff.

My first submission since returning is a food fetish/public humiliation short story. I'd be really really grateful to hear any comments, positive or negative, that anyone has!

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-eating-challenge

Let me know what you think

sugar xo

p.s. reaallly sorry if i've done this wrong, i've never posted on the forums before. please tell me if i have!