Feedback, por favor?

[Demona83]

Hello everyone! I've recently joined here, and I've posted my first story! I would love some feedback. I'm in the middle of another story, and would like to know how this one is received before I post the rest of the second one. Anything would help. Thanks!

The link is:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=440640

It's in the Erotic Couplings category, titled "Happiness"

 

[UKforester]

Off to have a read now...

 

[UKforester]

You there, Demona? Loved your story...very well written and highly erotic.