Feedback please?

[lapitup]

After enjoying this site for the better part of a year, I decided to try my hand at writing. This is the first time I have submitted anything for 'publication'. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=13546

 

[TigerTales]

Not bad. Well written... to the point. Interesting. Your subject isn't exactly my cup-o-tea but it held my attention to the end. Good job overall in my very inexperienced opinion.

TigerTales