Feedback for my non con story with an old man and virgin girl

[sweetdreamssss]

Set in India


https://www.literotica.com/s/old-man-takes-virgin-indian-girl

Feedback and criticism welcomed

 

[Jada59]

Set in India


https://www.literotica.com/s/old-man-takes-virgin-indian-girl

Feedback and criticism welcomed

That was a tough read for me for a variety of reasons. For one thing you said that the couple was in their 50's or 60's then referred to them as old. I saw a poll once of ages of people on this site. Most of us are in that age range. I don't consider myself to be old.

I didn't understand some of the terminology but I'm not Indian.

I also didn't like the violence.

Just my opinion.

 

[MelissaBaby]

Aside from a few types (I assume "rest bite" was meant to be "respite") and some odd syntax that I suspect might be cultural in origin, you are a good writer.

But while I understand that this is a fantasy, and not an uncommon one, it strains credulity. Starting early on, when the narrator describes the events as happening when she was "about nineteen", my suspension of disbelieve was shattered. No woman describing being raped multiple times and threatened with death, let alone losing her virginity in the occurrence, is likely to be vague about when it happened.

I have been an a situation not that far removed from the one you described, and nearly bailed out when I saw where your story was going. I stuck it out, but it was not a pleasant read.

 

[MelissaBaby]

That was a tough read for me for a variety of reasons. For one thing you said that the couple was in their 50's or 60's then referred to them as old. I saw a poll once of ages of people on this site. Most of us are in that age range. I don't consider myself to be old.

I had the same thought, but considered that poor rural people in India probably age much faster than more prosperous people in the west.

 

[Jada59]

I had the same thought, but considered that poor rural people in India probably age much faster than more prosperous people in the west.

That could be. And like you, I had an incident along those lines. Not exactly that. But perhaps that's what made it such a hard read for me.

 

[sweetdreamssss]

That was a tough read for me for a variety of reasons. For one thing you said that the couple was in their 50's or 60's then referred to them as old. I saw a poll once of ages of people on this site. Most of us are in that age range. I don't consider myself to be old.

I didn't understand some of the terminology but I'm not Indian.

I also didn't like the violence.

Just my opinion.

Thanks for your feedback,if I increase the age then the credibility of the strength of that man over that woman will be in doubt .

I know it was a rape fantasy which I wrote in another site long ago and recreated in lit after discovering it .